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  • Personal statement

  • My father took me to the gymnastics academy for the first time when I was seven years old, and it was the beginning of my athletic career.
    • My interest for sports peaked in my high school years thanks to her my coach, a kind and powerful individual who taught me and encouraged me to learn.
  • I joined the school basketball team and we won a lot of games during those years.
  • I was chosen from 40,000 applicants to study physical education at the University of Tehran, Iran’s best university.
  • I received seven coaching cards and a number of refereeing cards during this time.
  • Coaching sports teams provided me with a sense of confidence and prosperity, as well as a new perspective on sports.
    • Following graduation, I was hired as a sports teacher at a local high school, and I have always attempted to teach my students from my own experiences and lessons learned.
  • In school, I was in charge of sports and coaching teams, and I had to ensure that the teams had the necessary coordination and preparation for the competitions.
  • During my years of coaching and teaching, I realized that sport is more than simply physical activity; it also requires sacrifice and the ability to think strategically and quickly.
  • As a coach, I was able to have greater engagement with the athletes and provide encouragement for improved performance.
  • After a while, I participated in snooker and billiards refereeing courses and received an international refereeing card.
  • As a referee, I took part in various international tournaments and even won the Gold Referee Medal in competitions in India, which was quite valuable to me.
  • After that, I volunteered at the Billiards Federation as a women’s manager.
  • I’ve organized a number of competitions for female players, and I believe I have the ability to manage, interact, and communicate with a variety of people.
  • I was quite impressed with how the sports teams performed, organized, and coordinated the games at the 2017 Indoor Olympics in Turkmenistan, and this magnificent event encouraged me to continue my studies in sports management.
  • Over the years, I have had the opportunity to understand different aspects of sports.
  • I have proven to myself that I am a serious, diligent individual that is eager to take on any challenge.
  • I never liked to waste my time and I was always learning and teaching, and from teaching in school and coaching to participating in federation activities, it has influenced my life.
    • In addition to sports, I enjoy music and painting, anddoing volunteer work is one of my favorite things to do.
  • Working in federations gives me a sense of accomplishment, and sports management is something I really enjoy.
  • I am also fond of working with huge sports teams in my favorite sports: snooker, billiards and basketball.
    • I am convinced that a sports management academic education will assist me in achieving my objectives and gaining excellent career progress and job possibilities.
  • My interests in sports also include organizing sporting activities and participating in fundraising initiatives.
    • Searching the university website, I discovered that Msc in Sport Management is my preferred field of study, and I intend to apply to the University of Stirling for admission.
    • After graduation, I can work in huge sports organizations as a manager to fulfill my aims.
    • I appreciate you taking the time to review my files.
    • Should you need further questions, do not hesitate to contact me.
  • Yours sincerely,

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    • My father took me to the gymnastics academy for the first time when I was seven years old, and it was the beginning of my athletic career.
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    • My interest for sports peaked in my high school years thanks to her my coach, a kind and powerful individual who taught me and encouraged me to learn.
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    • My interest forin sports peaked in my high school years thanks to her my coach, a kind and powerful individual who taught me and encouraged me to learn.
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    • I was chosen from 40,000 applicants to study physical education at the University of Tehran, Iran’s best university.
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    • Following graduation, I was hired as a sports teacher at a local high school, and I have always attempted to teach my students from my own experiences and lessons learned.
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    • Following graduation, I was hired as a sports teacher at a local high school, and I have always attempted to teachtaught my students frombased on my own experiences and lessons learned.
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    • In school, I was in charge of sports and coaching teams, and I had to ensure that the teams had the necessary coordination and preparation for the competitions.
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    • During my years of coaching and teaching, I realized that sport is more than simply physical activity; it also requires sacrifice and the ability to think strategically and quickly.
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    • As a referee, I took part in various international tournaments and even won the Gold Referee Medal in competitions in India, which was quite valuable to me.
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    • I’ve organized a number of competitions for female players, and I believe I have the ability to manage, interact, and communicate with a variety of people.
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    • I was quite impressed with how the sports teams performed, organized, and coordinated the games at the 2017 Indoor Olympics in Turkmenistan, and this magnificent event encouraged me to continue my studies in sports management.
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    • I never liked to waste my time and I was always learning and teaching, and from teaching in school and coaching to participating in federation activities, it has influenced my life.
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    • I am convinced that a sports management academic education will assist me in achieving my objectives and gaining excellent career progress and job possibilities.
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    • I am convinced that a sports management academic education will assist me in achieving my objectives and gainingaccess to excellent career progress and job possibilopportunities.
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    • Searching the university website, I discovered that Msc in Sport Management is my preferred field of study, and I intend to apply to the University of Stirling for admission.
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    • Searching the university websites, I discovered that MsSc in Sport Management is my preferred field of study, and I intend to apply to the program at the University of Stirling for admission.
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