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    • USING A CREDIT CARD

    • USING A CREDIT CARD The use of credit cards has increased with the increase of the pandemic in the world because due to the pandemic , public began to suffer from poverty; therefore, public had to use credit cards.
  • There are some advantages and disadvantages to using a credit card.
    • Credit cards can be beneficial to make it easier to buy things ;on the other hand, since people are so easy to use credit cards, they also make it easy to overspend.
  • First of all, the main advantage of using a credit card is making it easier to buy things.
    • People using credit cards say that when you go to a shopping mall or anywhere, credit cards payment is easier than cash money.
    • Furthermore, people can earn reward points when they spend.
    • For instance, when you spend far more money for shopping, you can earn money thanks to your credit card.
    • Briefly, the more money you spend, the more money you earn.
    • On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of credit cards is easy to use and therefore people make it easy to overspend.
    • As people spend their money for shopping, people don’t care too much and along with using a credit card, people began to lose themselves while shopping, which creates a society with a lot of debt.
  • In addition, credit cards include annual fees.
    • People started to kill themselves because of this annual fees.
    • To sum up, there are some pros and cons to using a credit card.
    • The advantage of using a credit card is that it makes it easier to buy things while the main disadvantage is that it is easy to use and thus people make it easy to overspend.
    • I think people should start gradually decreasing credit card usage.

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    • USING A CREDIT CARD The use of credit cards has increased with the increase of the pandemic in the world because due to the pandemic , public began to suffer from poverty; therefore, public had to use credit cards.
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    • USING A CREDIT CARD¶
      The use of credit cards has increased with the increase of the pandemic inthroughout the world because
      due to the pandemic , public. Ordinary citizens began to suffer from poverty; therefore, public. As a result, the many people had to use credit cards.
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    • Credit cards can be beneficial to make it easier to buy things ;on the other hand, since people are so easy to use credit cards, they also make it easy to overspend.
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    • Credit cards can be beneficial
      to make it easier to buy things ;o. On the other hand, since people are so easy to use credit cards, they¶
      also make it
      it is easy to overspend them.
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    • People using credit cards say that when you go to a shopping mall or anywhere, credit cards payment is easier than cash money.
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    • People
      using credit cards say that wthen you go to a shopping mall or anywhere, credit cards payment is¶
      easier than cash money
      y are¶
      more convenient to use than cash in many places
      .
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    • For instance, when you spend far more money for shopping, you can earn money thanks to your credit card.
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    • For instance,
      when you spend far
      the more money for shopping, the more points you can earn money thanks to your credit card.
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    • On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of credit cards is easy to use and therefore people make it easy to overspend.
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    • On the other hand, the biggest disadvantage of credit cards it is easy to use and therefore¶
      people make it easy to
      get carried away and overspend.
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    • As people spend their money for shopping, people don’t care too much and along with using a credit card, people began to lose themselves while shopping, which creates a society with a lot of debt.
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    • As people spend their money for shopping, people don’t care too¶
      much and along with using a credit card, people
      become too comfortable and begain to lose themselves while shopping, which
      creates a society with a lot of debt.
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    • The advantage of using a credit card is that it makes it easier to buy things while the main disadvantage is that it is easy to use and thus people make it easy to overspend.
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    • The advantage of using a
      credit card is that it makes it easier to buy things, while the main disadvantage is that it is easy to use ¶
      and thus people make it easy to
      overspend.
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