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  • Save your planet!

  • Nowadays, most people share the view that our world is praying for help.
  • We have been careless for too many years and now we have to live with high levels of pollution… Can we have one chance to change that?
    • Firstly, it is undeniable that the transports generate a lot of air pollution that create hard breathing problems to the population.
    • As a result, we could use another transport like bicycle, train, bus or maybe go walking!
    • Secondly, rivers and seas are also an important point to consider because now we have the major part of our water contaminated and we need it clean to have an appropriate life.
  • Therefore, we have to promulgate the importance of water awareness and how much we need to take care of our rivers and seas.
    • Last but not least, clothing factories should be mentioned since are one of the most polluting factories.
    • However, there’s one simple solution, to show the people how to live with the necessary and avoiding the “fast-fashion”.
  • In my point of view, we have a lot of work to do If we want to restore our world.
    • That’s not impossible, we have to work with a common objective and think about the 4 R’s: recycle, reduce, reuse and rethink.

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    • We have been careless for too many years and now we have to live with high levels of pollution… Can we have one chance to change that?
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    • Firstly, it is undeniable that the transports generate a lot of air pollution that create hard breathing problems to the population.
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    • Firstly, it is undeniable that the transports generates a lot of air pollution that create hard breathing problems towhich in turn creates difficulties in breathing among the population.
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    • Firstly, it is undeniable that the transportsation generate a lot of air pollution that create hard breathing problems to thefor peopulationle.
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    • Secondly, rivers and seas are also an important point to consider because now we have the major part of our water contaminated and we need it clean to have an appropriate life.
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    • Secondly, rivers and seas are also an important point to consider because now we have the major parpresently most of our water is contaminated and we need ito clean it up to have an apimpropriateved quality of life.
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    • Therefore, we have to promulgate the importance of water awareness and how much we need to take care of our rivers and seas.
      투표하세요!
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    • Last but not least, clothing factories should be mentioned since are one of the most polluting factories.
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    • Last but not leastFinally, clothing factories should be mentioned since are one ofare among the most polluting types of factories.
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    • Last but not least, clothing factories should be mentioned since they are one of the most polluting factories.
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    • However, there’s one simple solution, to show the people how to live with the necessary and avoiding the “fast-fashion”.
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    • HowNevertheless, there’ is one simple solution,: to show the people how to live with thewhat is necessary andwhile avoiding the “fast-fashion”.
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    • That’s not impossible, we have to work with a common objective and think about the 4 R’s: recycle, reduce, reuse and rethink.
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    • That’is is not impossible, w. We have to work with a common objective and think about the 4 R’s: recycle, reduce, reuse and rethink. ¶
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