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    • Hi, I would apreciate some feedback about the essay.
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  • ---------------------------------------------- Topic: Some university students move away and live on their own while they are attending school, but others live at home with their family while they are students.
  • Which do you think is a better choice?
  • Give reasons to explain your answer.
    • ---------------------------------------------- Essay: The start of university represents, for the majority of students, a need for becoming independent while others that appear unlikely to happen.
    • Whereas the challenge idealistically represents high profitable benefits to those that stay independent it also provides several complications, but does it worth the risk?
    • While living alone students might have developed useful independence skills, an important part for real problem solving.
    • For instance they are expected to lead with cooking recipes for a successful balanced nutritious diet, and that is perhaps an appreciated skill that will probably be profitable.
    • Additionally the realization of home lavours is, by several specialists, imprescindible as those that made them normally suffer from a lack of recognition by all family members.
    • Therefore a better concienciation is a prior for achieving an equitative distribution of labourers, as they are normally done by women.
    • However, despite the beneficial arguments some main challenges will presumably be faced, as for instance money will eventually become a problem as student economical resources are scarcely ever enough to afford the daily routine.
    • In fact that is still being agraviate in some urban metropolises, which commonly suffer from an upward tendency for rental price due to inmobiliar speculation.
    • That being the case, studying abroad might require direct financial help from parents or, most probably, the application into the laboural market by the student.
    • Consequently some experts claim a hypothetical reduction of marks into those students, however the real implication of work at/in university studies differs significant from countries and persons/people.
    • In the last stage most of the students might face the dilemma of becoming semi-independent or stay safely at home while studying.
    • Perhaps it may be a profitable opportunity or an everlasting waste of money depending on each student and especially if time displacement is taken into consideration.
    • As a rule any premature expectative should not be taken into consideration, but making a trial, as for instance staying one month arbroath, will presumably draw to better conclusions.

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    • ---------------------------------------------- Topic: Some university students move away and live on their own while they are attending school, but others live at home with their family while they are students.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 5YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 5
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    • ---------------------------------------------- Essay: The start of university represents, for the majority of students, a need for becoming independent while others that appear unlikely to happen.
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      Essay:¶
      The       starcommencement of university represents, for the majority of students, a need forto becominge independent while for others that appearis is an unlikely to happevent.
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      The start of university represents, for the majority of students, a need       forto becominge independent, while for others that appear unlikely to happen.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 8YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 8
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    • Whereas the challenge idealistically represents high profitable benefits to those that stay independent it also provides several complications, but does it worth the risk?
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    • Whereas theile such a challenge idealistically represents high profitabrings about tangible benefits tofor those that staywho choose to remain independent, it also providgenerates several complications, but does it. Is it however worth the risk?
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 9YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 9
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    • While living alone students might have developed useful independence skills, an important part for real problem solving.
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    • WhileStudents who livinge alone students might havewell developed useful independence skills, an important part for the ability to live independently, important when engaging in real problem solving.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 10YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 10
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    • For instance they are expected to lead with cooking recipes for a successful balanced nutritious diet, and that is perhaps an appreciated skill that will probably be profitable.
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    • For instance they are expected to lead with cooking recipes for a successful balanced nutritious diet, and that is perhaps an appreciated skill that will probably be profitable, students due to financial restraints and the principal concern of remaining healthy during their studies must learn how to cook nutritious meals for themselves. This is an applicable skill of benefit to....
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 11YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 11
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    • Additionally the realization of home lavours is, by several specialists, imprescindible as those that made them normally suffer from a lack of recognition by all family members.
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    • Additionally the realization of home lavours is, by several specialists, imprescindiability to conduct work independently is, according to psychologists, indespensable as those that (made them normally suffer from a lack of recognition by all family members.) <--- this part is difficult to decipher with 100% certainty.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 12YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 12
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    • Therefore a better concienciation is a prior for achieving an equitative distribution of labourers, as they are normally done by women.
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    • (Therefore a better concienciation is a prior for achieving an equitative distribution of labourers, as they are normally done by women.) <--- highly unclear what you mean exactly here.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 13YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 13
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    • However, despite the beneficial arguments some main challenges will presumably be faced, as for instance money will eventually become a problem as student economical resources are scarcely ever enough to afford the daily routine.
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    • However, despite the beneficial arguments some main challenges will presumablyarguments regarding benefits, important challenges would continue to be faced, such as for instance money will eventually becomeing a problem as student economical resources are often scarcely ever enough to afford thefinance a daily routine.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 14YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 14
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    • In fact that is still being agraviate in some urban metropolises, which commonly suffer from an upward tendency for rental price due to inmobiliar speculation.
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    • In fact that is still being agraviate in some urban metropolises, which commonly suffer from an upward tendency for rental price due to inmobiliarThe payment of rents is often untenable due to realty speculation.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 15YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 15
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    • That being the case, studying abroad might require direct financial help from parents or, most probably, the application into the laboural market by the student.
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    • That being the case, studying abroad might require direct financial helpassistance from parents or, most probably, the application into the laboural market by part-time employment in parallel withe studentying.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 16YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 16
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    • Consequently some experts claim a hypothetical reduction of marks into those students, however the real implication of work at/in university studies differs significant from countries and persons/people.
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    • Consequently some experts claim a hypothetical reduction of marks into those students, however the real implication of work at/inin student performance at institutes. The real implications for concurrently working and studying at university studies differs significant fromly between countries and persons/peopleindividuals.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 17YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 17
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    • In the last stage most of the students might face the dilemma of becoming semi-independent or stay safely at home while studying.
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    • In the last stage most of theAdditionally, most students might face the dilemma of either becoming semi-independent abroad and achieving better educational outcomes or staying safely at homein their home countries while studying.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 18YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 18
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    • Perhaps it may be a profitable opportunity or an everlasting waste of money depending on each student and especially if time displacement is taken into consideration.
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    • PerhapsNevertheless - and depending on personal circumstances - it mayight be a profitvaluable opportunity or an everlasting waste of money depending on each student and, especially if time displacement is taken into consideration.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 19YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 19
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    • As a rule any premature expectative should not be taken into consideration, but making a trial, as for instance staying one month arbroath, will presumably draw to better conclusions.
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    • As a rule any, premature expectativeconclusions should not be taken into consideration, but making aimmediately drawn about working and studying abroad. A trial, as run, for instance stay, working one month arbroathd, willould presumably drawlead to better conclusions.
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    • YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 20YENİ bir DÜZELTME EKLE! - cümle 20