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• ---------------------------------------------- Essay: The start of university represents, for the majority of students, a need for becoming independent while others that appear unlikely to happen.

• Whereas the challenge idealistically represents high profitable benefits to those that stay independent it also provides several complications, but does it worth the risk?

• While living alone students might have developed useful independence skills, an important part for real problem solving.

• For instance they are expected to lead with cooking recipes for a successful balanced nutritious diet, and that is perhaps an appreciated skill that will probably be profitable.

• Additionally the realization of home lavours is, by several specialists, imprescindible as those that made them normally suffer from a lack of recognition by all family members.

• Therefore a better concienciation is a prior for achieving an equitative distribution of labourers, as they are normally done by women.

• However, despite the beneficial arguments some main challenges will presumably be faced, as for instance money will eventually become a problem as student economical resources are scarcely ever enough to afford the daily routine.

• In fact that is still being agraviate in some urban metropolises, which commonly suffer from an upward tendency for rental price due to inmobiliar speculation.

• That being the case, studying abroad might require direct financial help from parents or, most probably, the application into the laboural market by the student.

• Consequently some experts claim a hypothetical reduction of marks into those students, however the real implication of work at/in university studies differs significant from countries and persons/people.

• In the last stage most of the students might face the dilemma of becoming semi-independent or stay safely at home while studying.

• Perhaps it may be a profitable opportunity or an everlasting waste of money depending on each student and especially if time displacement is taken into consideration.

• As a rule any premature expectative should not be taken into consideration, but making a trial, as for instance staying one month arbroath, will presumably draw to better conclusions.