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    • The three most important personal factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be my age, career choice and my health.
    • Now I’m 23 which means that I’m just at the beginning of accumulating my assents and I’m not getting paid much.
    • My career choice is most likely to influence my income as well as the duration of my career, health and employment risks associated with this.
    • After all, my health luckily doesn’t take too much to spend on it at the present time.
    • The three most important economic factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be currency value, business cycles and customer prices.
    • I get paid in Russian rubles which is quite an unstable currency due to the Russian economy often depends on oil prices and international economic relations with the USA and the EU.
    • This means that my plans for abroad adventures ( once whey would be possible ) mostly depend on the value of the ruble against the dollar and euro.
    • I’m currently working in a B2B sector which means when the economy is in its contraction phase my salary is ”in danger”.
    • Since businesses tend to reduce their expenses during that period they could refuse the services the company I work for provides.
    • This means my return on investment of my labor decreasing and I rather have to work more to get the same amount of money or simply get paid less.
    • And the last, customer prices are an obvious factor that affects my financial planning decisions.
    • When prices for goods are rising because of inflation and my purchasing power declining then I have cut back on spendings or save less than I did before.
    • This, in turn, postpones the day of achievement of my mid-term and long term plans

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    • The three most important personal factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be my age, career choice and my health.
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    • The three most important personal factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be my age, career choice, and my health.
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    • Now I’m 23 which means that I’m just at the beginning of accumulating my assents and I’m not getting paid much.
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    • Now I’m 23 which myeanrs that I’m just at the beginning ofold. I recently began accumulating my assents and I’m not getting paid much.. My current salary is low.
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    • My career choice is most likely to influence my income as well as the duration of my career, health and employment risks associated with this.
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    • My career choice is most likely to influencecorrelate with my income as well as the duration of my career, health, and employmentthe risks associated with ithis.
    • My career choice is most likely to influence my income as well as the duration of my career, healthmy health and the duration and employment risks associated with thisof my career.
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    • After all, my health luckily doesn’t take too much to spend on it at the present time.
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    • After all, my health luckily doesn’t takeFortunately , my health is easy too much to spend on it at the present time.aintain.
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    • The three most important economic factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be currency value, business cycles and customer prices.
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    • The three most important economic factors that affect my financial planning decisions are going to be currency value, ¶
      business cycles and customer
      currency exchange rates,¶
      business patterns, and market
      prices.
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    • I get paid in Russian rubles which is quite an unstable currency due to the Russian economy often depends on oil prices and international economic relations with the USA and the EU.
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    • I get paid inThe currency of my salary is the Russian rubles, which is quite an unstable currency due to the Russian economy often’s dependsency on oil prices and international economic relations with the USA and the EU.
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    • I get paid in Russian rubles which is, a quite an unstable currency due to the Russian economy often dependsing on oil prices and international economic relations with the USAbetween Russia and tThe EUWest.
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    • This means that my plans for abroad adventures ( once whey would be possible ) mostly depend on the value of the ruble against the dollar and euro.
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    • This means that my plans for abroad adventures ( once whey would be possible ) mosConsequently, the prospects for my overseas adventures greatly depend on the value of the ruble against the dollar and the euro.
    • This means that my plans for abroad adventures abroad ( once when they would be again possible ) mostly depend on the value of the ruble against the dollar and euro.
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    • I’m currently working in a B2B sector which means when the economy is in its contraction phase my salary is ”in danger”.
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    • I’m currently working in a B2B sector, which means that when the economy is in its contraction phaseng my salary is in danger”. of being reduced.
    • I’m currently working in a B2B sector which means, meaning that when the economy is in its contraction phase, my salary is ”in danger” of being cut.
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    • Since businesses tend to reduce their expenses during that period they could refuse the services the company I work for provides.
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    • Since businesses tend to reduce their expenses during thatsuch a period they couldan refuse the services the company I work for proo provide servidces.
    • Since businesses tend to reduce their expenses during thatsuch periods, they could refuse the services that the company I work for provides.
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    • This means my return on investment of my labor decreasing and I rather have to work more to get the same amount of money or simply get paid less.
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    • This means my return on investmentthat the fruits of my labor are decreasing and I ratherwould have to work more to get the same amount of money or simply get paidearn less.
    • This means mythat the return on investment of my labor is decreasing and I ratherwould have to work more to getrather more for the same amount of money or simply get paid less.
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    • When prices for goods are rising because of inflation and my purchasing power declining then I have cut back on spendings or save less than I did before.
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    • When prices for goods are rising because of inflation and, my purchasing power declining then I have cut back on spendinges. As a result, I have reduce my expenses or save less than I did before.
    • When prices for goods are rising because of inflation and my purchasing power is declining then. So, I have to cut back on spendings or save less than I did before.
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    • This, in turn, postpones the day of achievement of my mid-term and long term plans
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    • This, in turn, postpones the day of achievement of my mid-term and long term plansIn conclusion, all these factors combined affect my plans for the future.

    • This, in turn, postpones twhe day ofn I can achievement of my mid-term and long -term plans ¶

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