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    • CAE Essay_the facilities are needed most

    • In regards to the recent discussion about the facilities, I would like to write an essay devoted to the current situation of our region.
  • According to the fact that there are not any sports centers or history museums in our neighborhood, I am going to analyze the advantages of both facilities and suggest which one is needed most.
  • It goes without saying that there are two essential directions to develop people’s personalities.
    • On the one hand, we must stimulate our brain and a wide range of enlightening and entertaining activities, which a history museum can offer, is a decent way to do it.
    • Nobody will deny that knowledge of homeland history is an essential part of the educational process.
    • Moreover, we can enrich the school program and even bring together adults by offering various thematic activities such as lectures, reading clubs, chess tournaments, etc. On the other hand, it’s crucial to build up our physical condition.
    • In a recent survey, 60% of our residents said the local population is clinically obese.
    • This shocking statistic is the vital point that we need to take into consideration while making the decision.
    • It’s believed that there are lots of possibilities to do exercises and a sports center isn’t the best and the only place.
    • But where should people practice sports, if the climate of our region allows them to do it outside only for half of a year?
    • Not only are sports centers more comfortable but also offer professional help to solve weight issues.
  • In conclusion, I would like to admit that both facilities are needed in our area.
    • Nevertheless, the high priority is the health of the population and, based on the statistic data and the weather conditions, I would suggest considering the sports center as the facility that is needed the most.

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    • In regards to the recent discussion about the facilities, I would like to write an essay devoted to the current situation of our region.
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    • InWith regards to the recent discussion about the facilities, I would like to write an essay devoted to the current situation of our region.
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    • According to the fact that there are not any sports centers or history museums in our neighborhood, I am going to analyze the advantages of both facilities and suggest which one is needed most.
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    • On the one hand, we must stimulate our brain and a wide range of enlightening and entertaining activities, which a history museum can offer, is a decent way to do it.
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    • On the one hand, we must stimulate our brain an. Also, we need a wide range of enlightening and entertaining activities, which a history museum can offer, is a decent way to do it both of.
    • On the one hand, we must stimulate our brain andwith a wide range of enlightening and entertaining activities, which a history museum can offer,. This is a decent way to do it.
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    • Moreover, we can enrich the school program and even bring together adults by offering various thematic activities such as lectures, reading clubs, chess tournaments, etc. On the other hand, it’s crucial to build up our physical condition.
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    • Moreover, we canould possibly enrich the school program and even bring adults together adults by offering various thematic activities such as lectures, reading clubs, and chess tournaments, etc. ¶
      . On the other hand, it is crucial to build upimprove our physical conditionhealth.
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    • It’s believed that there are lots of possibilities to do exercises and a sports center isn’t the best and the only place.
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    • It’s believed that there are lots of possibilities to do exercises and that a sports center isn't the best and the only place.
    • It is believed that there are lots ofmany possibilities to dofor exercises and a sports centere isn’ not the best and the only place.
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    • But where should people practice sports, if the climate of our region allows them to do it outside only for half of a year?
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    • But where should people practicse sports, if the climate of our region allows them to do it outside for only for half of aeach year?
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    • Nevertheless, the high priority is the health of the population and, based on the statistic data and the weather conditions, I would suggest considering the sports center as the facility that is needed the most.
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    • Nevertheless, the higher priority is the healthat of the population' s health and, based on the statistical data and thelocal weather conditions, I would suggest considering the sports centere as the facility that is needed the mostmore needed facility.
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