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    • Frederic Taylor’s scientific method to management in its original form is hard to implement in nowadays work environment.
    • But in some areas, it still can be applied to increase the output of workforce effort.
    • For example, producing hand-made pottery, hairdressing, or cooking in the restaurant are mostly manual jobs.
    • Hence, their outcome can be measured, analyzed, and improved by changing the equipment, setting better lighting in the workplace, or cooking on the most optimal sequence.
    • Taylorism is difficult to apply in job positions like a software developer, social media marketing manager, designer, or sales representative where the end result of work is depended on task difficulty, creativity, other people, specific skills, and knowledge required for the job and experience.
    • The most common measurements used to manage a process that I’ve seen is time limitations or the number of clients or the amount of money that a worker should earn for the company in a certain amount of time.
    • From my own working experience when I worked for a short period of time as a sales representative, managers usually established a personal plan for each employee based on their previous work performance and hypotheses based on the analysis of data ( for example, annual increase and decrease of demand for their services).
    • Most of the time those measurements lead to the result especially in countries with low institutional collectivism and in companies when measured personal achievements instead of achievements of a group or team.
    • This measurement is motivational for the employee since everyone tries to overfulfill the plan and get an extra payment and easy to use for managers to determine the output and reach the company’s goals.
    • Sometimes the system might be not optimal.
    • For example, when managers underestimate the amount of work to be done and set unrealistic deadlines.
    • Or when managers set idealistic plans that could not be fulfilled and employee understands it from the very beginning.
    • In those cases, it’s only overwhelming employees and makes them less motivated.

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    • Frederic Taylor’s scientific method to management in its original form is hard to implement in nowadays work environment.
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    • Frederic Taylor’s scientific method with respect to management, in its original form, is hard to implement in nowadifficult to apply in todays work environment.
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    • For example, producing hand-made pottery, hairdressing, or cooking in the restaurant are mostly manual jobs.
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    • For example, producing hand-made pottery, hairdressing, or cooking in thea restaurant are mostly manual jobs.
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    • Hence, their outcome can be measured, analyzed, and improved by changing the equipment, setting better lighting in the workplace, or cooking on the most optimal sequence.
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    • Hence, their outcomeresults can be measured, analyzed, and improved by changusing the latest equipment, setimplementing better lighting in the workplace, or cooking on the most optimal sequence, or cooking more efficiently.
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    • Taylorism is difficult to apply in job positions like a software developer, social media marketing manager, designer, or sales representative where the end result of work is depended on task difficulty, creativity, other people, specific skills, and knowledge required for the job and experience.
      투표하세요!
    • Taylorism is difficult to apply in job positions like that of a software developer, social media marketing manager, designer, or sales representative where those end result of work is dependeds on task difficulty, creativity, other people, specific skills, and knowledge required for the jobcreativity and experienctise.
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    • The most common measurements used to manage a process that I’ve seen is time limitations or the number of clients or the amount of money that a worker should earn for the company in a certain amount of time.
      투표하세요!
    • The most common measurements used to manage a procesfactors that I’ve seen isare time limitations orconstrain, the number of clients or the amount of money that a worker should earn for the company in a certain amount of time, and an employee's salary (or wage).
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    • From my own working experience when I worked for a short period of time as a sales representative, managers usually established a personal plan for each employee based on their previous work performance and hypotheses based on the analysis of data ( for example, annual increase and decrease of demand for their services).
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    • From my own working experience when I worked for a short period of timeWhen I was working as a sales representative, managers usually established a personal plan for each employee based on their previous work performance and hypotheses based on the analysis of data ( for example, annual increase and decreasepatterns of demand for their services).
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    • Most of the time those measurements lead to the result especially in countries with low institutional collectivism and in companies when measured personal achievements instead of achievements of a group or team.
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    • Most of theOften times, those measurements lead to the result especially in countries with low institutional collectivism and in companies when measured personal achievements instead of achievements of a group or team.reflect how well, or otherwise, a business optimizes it’s resources.
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    • This measurement is motivational for the employee since everyone tries to overfulfill the plan and get an extra payment and easy to use for managers to determine the output and reach the company’s goals.
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    • This measurement iscan motivational for the employee since everyone tries to overfulfill the plan and get an extra payment and easy to use for managers to determine the output and reach the company’s goals.e employees to exercise continuous improvement on their part.
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    • For example, when managers underestimate the amount of work to be done and set unrealistic deadlines.
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    • For example, when managers underestimate the amount of work to be done and setworkload and establish unrealistic deadlineexpectations.
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    • Or when managers set idealistic plans that could not be fulfilled and employee understands it from the very beginning.
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    • Or whEven managers set idealistic plans that could not be fulfilled and employee understands it employee could see this from the very beginning.
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