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  • Evoked experience

  • Let’s go back a few seconds before I saw my neighbor’s face.
  • The experience does not begin with an external perception.
  • I walk along the pavement and see the street and the pedestrians, but in that precise moment my mind is not focused on the external world.
  • The experience, from the moment I have chosen to cut out, begins with the image of my mother.
  • It is the image of the first interaction I had with her that day.
    • I have just put on a jacket, I turned around and there she is.
  • Her eyes are big and bright, like a cat when, seeing a threat, is waiting for its first move.
  • She sees me and, as anticipating to every move, says: “Good morning”.
  • What is she afraid of?
  • She fears I say first “hello”.
  • That would be very painful for her.
    • She says “Good morning” not as a greet, but as a sign of power.
    • She doesn’t want to greet; she wants to greet first, and she does it with the violence of the worst human feelings.
  • That is a frequent experience.
    • That is my life all the mornings, so I had decided never to fight against her.
    • I always wait for her greeting and then I respond friendly.
    • His greeting is like the victory of a race whose opponent never was there, like the shoot of a cowboy to a disarmed opponent.
    • I had just turned around and I was stroked by all her dominance.
  • I know she is so, then it is not painful the most of the times.
  • I prepare myself for the attack and it doesn’t hurt.
  • But today I was unprepared.
    • I just turned around and saw her.
    • The constant drip of pain in the pit of the stomach turns into an injection of rage rising through my throat till my brain.
  • I suppose when I was walking, I saw the current world, I don’t remember, but that injection of pain evoked in the subtlest way that experience with my mother.
  • Then I said to myself: “I must live in the present moment”.
    • I felt my breathing, felt the warm of the sun and the cold of the wind.
    • I saw a seller of avocados, the dogs in the street, that woman in pajama at 11 o’ clock.
    • I tried to remember the beautiful things of what I am and what I want to be.
  • I imagined myself being a better human being in better material conditions.
  • But the pain apprehended as rage remained.
    • Then I see my neighbor’s face.

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