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Testo da Lesheey - English

  • Women in the army

  • Some people argue that women can be excellent soldiers.
    • Other claims that service in the army is not suitable for the weaker sex.
    • I am persuaded that women are as capable as men in many ways and therefore I agree that the military should be a career open for them.
  • Not surprisingly, some people believe that women can not withstand the physical exertion required in military work as men can.
    • In defense of this opinion, it is a fact that indeed women are biologically weaker than men, and extreme loads could affect their health.
    • According to statistics that has been provided by the Russian Military Forces, after the first year of training only 43% of the 3.2% women who joined initially continue, with most of them deciding to quit, because they could not handle its physical demands and consequently, many of them are diagnosed with endocrinal problems particular affecting their reproductive system.
    • And this is an excellent example, demonstrating how difficult it is for women to serve in the Russian army.
    • Considering the problem of women in army from a different angle, it is worth noting that there are a number of specialties where high physical training is not required.
    • For example, on a par with men, they could be military communications, engineers, programmers, and so on.
    • And this is confirmed by the statistical report of the same organization: 86% of women who have chosen military specialty are not connected with high physical loads, successfully complete their studies and continue to serve on a contract basis.
  • In conclusion, taking everything into account, I am firmly convinced that women can be good soldiers, provided that their military specialty does not require high physical training.
    • This is because neither is it believed that the sex gives some advantages, with the exception of physical strength, nor are there any reasons why women would be worse soldiers than men.

PER FAVORE, AIUTA A CORREGGERE OGNI FRASE! - English

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    • I am persuaded that women are as capable as men in many ways and therefore I agree that the military should be a career open for them.
      Vota adesso!
    • I am persuadedbelieve that women are as capable as men in many ways and therefore I agree that a career in the military should be a career open forto them.
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 3AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 3
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    • In defense of this opinion, it is a fact that indeed women are biologically weaker than men, and extreme loads could affect their health.
      Vota adesso!
    • In defense of this opinion, it is a fact that indeed women are indeed biologically weaker than men, and extreme loads could affect their health.
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 5AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 5
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    • According to statistics that has been provided by the Russian Military Forces, after the first year of training only 43% of the 3.2% women who joined initially continue, with most of them deciding to quit, because they could not handle its physical demands and consequently, many of them are diagnosed with endocrinal problems particular affecting their reproductive system.
      Vota adesso!
    • According to statistics that has been provided by the Russian Military Forces, after the first year of training only 43% of the 3.2% women who joined initially continue, with most of them deciding to quit, because they could not handle its physical demands and consequently, many of them are diagnosed with endocrinal problems which particularly affecting their reproductive system.
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 6AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 6
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    • Considering the problem of women in army from a different angle, it is worth noting that there are a number of specialties where high physical training is not required.
      Vota adesso!
    • Considering the problem of women in the army from a different angle, it is worth noting that there are a number of specialties where high physical training is not required.
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 8AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 8
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    • And this is confirmed by the statistical report of the same organization: 86% of women who have chosen military specialty are not connected with high physical loads, successfully complete their studies and continue to serve on a contract basis.
      Vota adesso!
    • And this is confirmed by the statistical report of the same organization: 86% of women who have chosen a military specialty are not connected with high physical loads, successfully complete their studies and continue to serve on a contract basis.
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 10AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 10
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    • In conclusion, taking everything into account, I am firmly convinced that women can be good soldiers, provided that their military specialty does not require high physical training.
      Vota adesso!
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 11AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 11
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    • This is because neither is it believed that the sex gives some advantages, with the exception of physical strength, nor are there any reasons why women would be worse soldiers than men.
      Vota adesso!
    • This is because neither is itAs there is no reason to believed that the sex gives some advantagesbiology advantages one sex over another, with the exception of physical strength, nor are there anyre no reasons why women would be worse soldiers than men. ¶
    • AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 12AGGIUNGI una NUOVA CORREZIONE! - Frase 12