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  • Myths and heroes: Introduction: To start with, in a way general, a myth is one fictitious character who is often represented as one hero in the eyes of the people.
    • Indeed, one hero is one people different compared with other one.
    • The capacities of one hero are superior to the average but how to define the average?
    • We are going to wonder what is a hero in a general way and more specifically, why Sherlock Holmes can be considered as a hero?
    • Having presented the idea that I have of a hero generally, I am going to try to explain in what Sherlock Holmes is a hero for me.
    • I/ A hero generally: First,what one hero?
    • According to me a hero it is the person who has the intellectual or physical abilities to do a service to the society.
    • Indeed, a hero has necessarily no great power and is not necessarily fictitious.
    • In our everyday life, we face everyday heroes of all the types.
    • Factors which gives us the mail in the morning, the baker who gives us the bread, the doctor who looks after us, the police which protects us, or still the most important according to me because they allow us to learn: the professors.
    • Naturally, it can appear strange coach according to the ideas that are made people, the heroes are necessarily men or women developed the muscle and having great powers as to steal in the air, to throw of the fire, invisible future etc. … But the definition of a hero for me is much vaster and much more opened.
    • For me, the society possesses millions of heroes who help us for our everyday life.
    • As I said it previously, the workers are heroes for me, I know that every working person lasts to gain its salary, help the society and it makes of this person one heroin.
    • Here is the personal definition which can seem strange of a hero but which is according to me the rather true.
  • Well on, the characters fictitious as spiderman, superman, to wonder woman, batman, are heroes but they are also fictitious and for me, the strongest heroes, are present in the real life.
  • II/ Is Sherlock Holmes a hero ?
    • Besides, during year, we studied a fictitious character particularly amazing according to me.
  • Indeed, Sherlock Holmes is a full character of the society.
    • It’s certain that a character as this one cannot exist in the real life but we can classify it all the same in the category of the fictitious heroes.
    • It’s someone who has an impressive intellectual capacity and a capacity of analysis superior to the average and it’s for me, qualities of hero that Sherlock possesses.
    • Indeed, it’s someone who helps the investigators, and he saves a lot of life by using his capacity to be deducted from things at people and it is not ordinary capacities.
    • Furthermore, it’s someone very mysterious and he can make, in a short time, one list of information on a person whom he has just met.
  • That's why I would classify him in the category of the fictitious heroes.
  • Nevertheless, we could however think it is not a hero because it is all the same somebody who likes crimes and who adores stopping serial killer.
  • Sherlock has no limit and we can see him in particular in the first episode of the series with the serial killer who killed people by giving them a poison.
    • He had agreed to meet the challenges and to take the pill with the killer.
    • That's why to consider it one heroin can be disputed but according to me, we can say all the same that it’s a hero because he makes the happiness around him for a major left of his time.
    • Conclusion: To conclude, I would mean that the vision of a hero at people can vary but she can also vary at the same person according to the age which she has.
    • Indeed, when we are small, a hero are the ones that we see on the television as spiderman or superman but when we increase, this vision of things changes.
  • Indeed, the definition becomes wider and vaster.
    • Heroin is more the one only has great powers but the one who helps the others and who serves the population thanks to its work.
  • For me, a hero it’s the person who helps people, who saves them, who teaches them and who advise them without having super-powers.

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    • Myths and heroes: Introduction: To start with, in a way general, a myth is one fictitious character who is often represented as one hero in the eyes of the people.
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    • We are going to wonder what is a hero in a general way and more specifically, why Sherlock Holmes can be considered as a hero?
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    • We are going to wonder what is athe hero in a general way and more specifically, why Sherlock Holmes can be considered as a hero?
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    • Having presented the idea that I have of a hero generally, I am going to try to explain in what Sherlock Holmes is a hero for me.
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    • Having presented the idea that I have of a hero generally, I am going to try to explain in what Sherlock Holmes is a hero for me.
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    • According to me a hero it is the person who has the intellectual or physical abilities to do a service to the society.
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    • According to mey opinion a hero it is the person who has the intellectual or physical abilities to do a service toserve the society.
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    • Factors which gives us the mail in the morning, the baker who gives us the bread, the doctor who looks after us, the police which protects us, or still the most important according to me because they allow us to learn: the professors.
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    • Factors which gives us the mail in the morning, the baker who gives us the bread, the doctor who looks aftertreats us, the police which protects us, or still the most important according to me because they allow us to learn: the professors.
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    • Naturally, it can appear strange coach according to the ideas that are made people, the heroes are necessarily men or women developed the muscle and having great powers as to steal in the air, to throw of the fire, invisible future etc. … But the definition of a hero for me is much vaster and much more opened.
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    • Naturally, it can appear strange coach according to the ideas that are made people, the heroes are neccessarily men or women developed the muscle and having great powers as to steal in the air, to throw of the fire, invisible future etc. … But the definition of a hero for me is much vaster and much more opened.
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    • As I said it previously, the workers are heroes for me, I know that every working person lasts to gain its salary, help the society and it makes of this person one heroin.
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    • As I said it previously, the workers are heroes for me, I know that every working person lasts to gain its salary, help the society and it makes of this person one heroin.
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    • Well on, the characters fictitious as spiderman, superman, to wonder woman, batman, are heroes but they are also fictitious and for me, the strongest heroes, are present in the real life.
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    • It’s certain that a character as this one cannot exist in the real life but we can classify it all the same in the category of the fictitious heroes.
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    • It’s certain that a character as this one cannot exist in the real life but we can classify it all the same inas the category of the fictitious heroes.
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    • It’s someone who has an impressive intellectual capacity and a capacity of analysis superior to the average and it’s for me, qualities of hero that Sherlock possesses.
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    • It’s someone who has an impressive intellectual capacity and a capacity of analysis superior to the average and it’s for me, qualities of a hero that Sherlock possesses.
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    • Indeed, it’s someone who helps the investigators, and he saves a lot of life by using his capacity to be deducted from things at people and it is not ordinary capacities.
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    • Indeed, it’s someone who helps the investigators, and he saves a lotplentyes of lifeves by using his capacity to be deducted from things at people and it is not ordinary capacities.
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    • Furthermore, it’s someone very mysterious and he can make, in a short time, one list of information on a person whom he has just met.
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    • Furthermore, it’s someone very mysterious and he can make, in a short time, onefull list of information on a person whom he has just met.
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    • Nevertheless, we could however think it is not a hero because it is all the same somebody who likes crimes and who adores stopping serial killer.
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    • Sherlock has no limit and we can see him in particular in the first episode of the series with the serial killer who killed people by giving them a poison.
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    • That's why to consider it one heroin can be disputed but according to me, we can say all the same that it’s a hero because he makes the happiness around him for a major left of his time.
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    • That's why to consider it one heroin can be disputed but according to me, we can say all the same that it’s a hero because he makes the happiness around him for a major left of his time.
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    • Conclusion: To conclude, I would mean that the vision of a hero at people can vary but she can also vary at the same person according to the age which she has.
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    • Conclusion:¶
      To conclude, I
      would mean that the vision of a hero at people can vary but she can also vary at the same person according to the age which she has.
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    • Indeed, when we are small, a hero are the ones that we see on the television as spiderman or superman but when we increase, this vision of things changes.
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    • Indeed, when we are small, a hero are the ones that we see on the television as spiderman or superman but when we increasegrow up, this vision of things changes.
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    • Heroin is more the one only has great powers but the one who helps the others and who serves the population thanks to its work.
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    • Heroin is more the one only has great powers but the one who helps the others and who serves the population thanks to its work.
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    • For me, a hero it’s the person who helps people, who saves them, who teaches them and who advise them without having super-powers.
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