Corrections

BANTU BUAT PEMBETULAN SEKARANG!Tidak dapat dibatalkan

Teks daripada riichard_c - English

  • Chapter number 1 * please help me to corret this

  • Once upon time an old man, he was digging and found a strange freeze woman by ice when suddenly by of the hot sun the ice started to melt slowly, the old man hid behind a tree , when whole the ice melt she was naked and shook herself and her body was shining and the old men scared and fled, the woman used her hair as a weapon and frozen him then she unfroze him to said him that got calm then she started to explain him who is she and also where does she come from, when he understood everything, he left without saying nothing.
  • The woman called him before he left her and asked him > why do you leave? and he answered her > Go away, leave this world because the humans destroy even their owns earth and I know they will destroy you.

MOHON BANTU UNTUK BETULKAN SETIAP AYAT! - English

  • Title
  • Ayat 1
    • Once upon time an old man, he was digging and found a strange freeze woman by ice when suddenly by of the hot sun the ice started to melt slowly, the old man hid behind a tree , when whole the ice melt she was naked and shook herself and her body was shining and the old men scared and fled, the woman used her hair as a weapon and frozen him then she unfroze him to said him that got calm then she started to explain him who is she and also where does she come from, when he understood everything, he left without saying nothing.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1
  • Ayat 2
    • The woman called him before he left her and asked him > why do you leave? and he answered her > Go away, leave this world because the humans destroy even their owns earth and I know they will destroy you.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2