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  • Happiness

    • As I'm developing my perception of life.
    • I thought sharing what I have found in English may be a good idea : According to a study, People are more likely to suicide when they have meaningless life rather than unhappy life.
    • So, it may be more interesting to look for meaningful life instead of happy life.
    • Happiness came after, when you feel the fulfillment of living a meaningful life.
    • To find a meaning to your life, you must set goals.
    • Those goals must be coherent with values that you consider as important.
    • Working hard on goals, doesn't necessarily make feel happy in short term, but at long term it will.
    • Achieving sub-goals of your main goals every day will cause you brain to release endorphine, which make you fell happy.
    • So for this reason I believe in this following quote : “happiness is the progressive realization goals”

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    • I thought sharing what I have found in English may be a good idea : According to a study, People are more likely to suicide when they have meaningless life rather than unhappy life.
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    • I thought about sharing what I have found in English mayto be a good idea :¶
      According to a study, People are more likely to       commit suicide when they have meaningless life rather than an unhappy life.
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    • I thoughtBy sharing what I have found in English mayight be a good idea :¶
      According to a study, PResearch suggests that some people are more likely to commit suicide when they feel they have a meaningless life rather than an unhappy life.
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    • Working hard on goals, doesn't necessarily make feel happy in short term, but at long term it will.
      투표하세요!
    • Working hard on goals, doesn't necessarily make them feel happy in short term, but atfor long term it will.
      AjayKumarAjayKumar profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
    • Working hard on goals, doesn't necessarily make people feel happy in the short term, but atin the long term it will.
      JOHN2TJOHN2T profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
    • Working hard on goals, doesn't necessarily make you feel happy in a short term, but at long term it will.
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    • Achieving sub-goals of your main goals every day will cause you brain to release endorphine, which make you fell happy.
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    • Achieving sub-goals of your main goals every day will cause your brain to release endorphines, which will make you felel happy.
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    • Achieving sub-goals of your main goals everyach day will cause your brain to release endorphine,s which makewill help you to felel happyier.
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    • Achieving sub-goals of your main goals every day will causis the main reason to make your brain to releasproduce endorphine, which make you fell happy.
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    • So for this reason I believe in this following quote : “happiness is the progressive realization goals”
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    • So for this reason I believe in thise following quote :¶
      “      hHappiness is the progressive realization of worthy goals”.
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