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  • • My name is *****.
  • I am 21 years old and I come from ****** near the **** valley in ****.
    • However I live in ***** during my internship period.
    • I have been enthusiastic since childhood about the outdoors and ridings sports like climbing, paragliding, hiking and of course skiing and snowboarding.
    • I will also participate in an introduction to mountaineering in June at Chamonix Mont-Blanc thanks to the alpine ******.
    • • I am currently in a second years of material sciences and engineering degree in the university of Savoie.
  • This training has allowed me to acquire a wide knowledge relative to the characteristics and technical use of materials.
    • We mainly studied plastics, composites and metals; however we never learned sciences about textiles.
  • (These characteristics allow me to integrate all teams of design office, Research and development, production, testing and quality control.) • I participated in many school activities, which widened my horizons and gave me opportunities to do internships with 2 companies.
    • All of this was very useful during my formation.
    • During this period, I have learnt much.
    • I have learned the values of teamwork and commitment, how to work hard, how to concentrate and focus on goals, and how to balance my time and priorities.
    • The passing 3 months have offered me a good chance to give full play to my creativity, and my diligence.
    • • I am seeking an opportunity to integrate your course.
    • It will conciliate my objectives and my desire.
  • My professional experience and my awareness of your unparalleled reputation have led me to want to learn with you.
    • More than that, I’m already in contact with the ***** service of ****** for the next year and be really motivate for this course.
    • • Finally, I think I have a lot of things to add in this course and many more to log, I have a lot of idea for further.
    • This year I did a presentation about “bamboo clothings” and I inquired about Innovating clothing.
    • Doing it, showed me I’m really determined and objective about my desire to work in this industry • Asset: I am motivate, enthusiastic and dynamic.
    • I confident about my choice to integrate this training.
    • • Weak point/Shortcoming : Demanding with myself when I love what I do and I’m honest • In the future I want to become a product manager or designer, for an outdoor sports company which have the value of riding and mountain sports or simply work as a high level technician in the leisure, textiles and footwear industry.
    • • I evenly work as a waiter in the ski resort “***** “ every winter to paid my training

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    • I have been enthusiastic since childhood about the outdoors and ridings sports like climbing, paragliding, hiking and of course skiing and snowboarding.
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    • I have been enthusiastic since childhood about the outdoors and ridings sports likesuch as: climbing, paragliding, hiking and, of course, skiing and snowboarding.
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    • Since childhood, I have been enthusiastic since childhood about the outdoors and ridings sports like: climbing, paragliding, hiking and of course skiing and snowboarding.
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    • I will also participate in an introduction to mountaineering in June at Chamonix Mont-Blanc thanks to the alpine ******.
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    • I will also participate in an introduction to mountaineering in June at Chamonix Mont-Blanc thanks to the aAlpine ******.
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    • • I am currently in a second years of material sciences and engineering degree in the university of Savoie.
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    • • I am currently in athe second years of material sciences and engineering degree in the university of Savoie.
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    • • I am currently in a my second years of ma Material sSciences and eEngineering degree inat the university of Savoie.
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    • This training has allowed me to acquire a wide knowledge relative to the characteristics and technical use of materials.
      투표하세요!
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    • We mainly studied plastics, composites and metals; however we never learned sciences about textiles.
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    • We mainly studied plastics, composites and metals; however, we never learned sciences aboutabout the science of textiles.
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    • (These characteristics allow me to integrate all teams of design office, Research and development, production, testing and quality control.) • I participated in many school activities, which widened my horizons and gave me opportunities to do internships with 2 companies.
      투표하세요!
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    • I have learned the values of teamwork and commitment, how to work hard, how to concentrate and focus on goals, and how to balance my time and priorities.
      투표하세요!
    • I have learnedt the values of teamwork and commitment, how to work hard, how to concentrate and focus on goals, and how to balance my time and priorities.
      StephanyRoseskyStephanyRosesky profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
    • I have learned: the values of teamwork and commitment, how to work hard, how to concentrate and focus on goals, and how to balance my time and priorities.
      ruthajeffersonruthajefferson profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
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    • The passing 3 months have offered me a good chance to give full play to my creativity, and my diligence.
      투표하세요!
    • The passingt 3 months have offeredgiven me a good chance to give full play to my creativity, and my diligence.
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      투표하세요!
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    • More than that, I’m already in contact with the ***** service of ****** for the next year and be really motivate for this course.
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    • More than thatover, I’m already in contact with the ***** service of ****** for the next year and will be really motivated for this course.
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    • • Finally, I think I have a lot of things to add in this course and many more to log, I have a lot of idea for further.
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    • • Finally, I think I have a lot of things to add inI can bring to this course and manyuch more to log,. I have a lot of idea fors to further.
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    • This year I did a presentation about “bamboo clothings” and I inquired about Innovating clothing.
      투표하세요!
    • This year, I did a presentation about “bamboo clothings” and I inquired about Iinnovating clothing.
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      투표하세요!
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    • Doing it, showed me I’m really determined and objective about my desire to work in this industry • Asset: I am motivate, enthusiastic and dynamic.
      투표하세요!
    • DBy doing this, it, showed me that I’m really determined and objective about my desire to work in this industry¶¶¶• Asset: I am motivated, enthusiastic and dynamic.
      Jrc513Jrc513 profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
    • DBy doing it, showed methis, I learned that I’m really determined and objective about my desire to work in this industry¶¶¶• Asset: I am motivated, enthusiastic and dynamic.
      ruthajeffersonruthajefferson profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
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    • • Weak point/Shortcoming : Demanding with myself when I love what I do and I’m honest • In the future I want to become a product manager or designer, for an outdoor sports company which have the value of riding and mountain sports or simply work as a high level technician in the leisure, textiles and footwear industry.
      투표하세요!
    • • Weak point/Shortcoming : Demanding withOpen about myself when I love what I do and I’m honest¶¶• In the future, I want to become a product manager or designer, for an outdoor sports company, which haveentails the value of riding and mountain sports or to simply work as a high -level technician in the leisure, textiles and footwear industry.
      Jrc513Jrc513 profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
    • • Weak point/Shortcoming : Demanding with myself when I love what I do and I’m honest¶¶• In the future I want to become a product manager or designer, for an outdoor sports company which haveentails the values of riding and mountain sports or simply work as a high level technician in the leisure, textiles and footwear industry.
      ruthajeffersonruthajefferson profile picture 댓글
      투표하세요!
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