Korreksies

Text from phoenixfly88 - English

    • A motivation letter for a summer course

    • Dear Sir or Madam After having reviewed your offer for a summer course in pharmacy, I decided to fill in an application form.
    • Highly interested, I propose to you to examine my candidature.
    • I am a Colombian graduated pharmacist and I’m currently completing a master’s degree of public health (1st year) at the Paris Diderot University and an internship in the Paris region’ pharmacoepidemiology center.
    • In the future, I would like to specialize myself in pharmacoepidemiology and pharmaceutical policies research.
    • I’m particularly passionate in deepening my knowledge about the impact of medicines on public health and I would like to focus my career in developing multidisciplinary solutions to global problematics in this field .
    • Indeed, since summer 2010, I work as the chief editor and writer for the bulletin of the Drug Information Center of the Colombia’s National University (CIMUN), which is a member of the International Society of Drug Bulletins (ISDB).
  • CIMUN’s bulletin intends to deliver rigorous, critical and independent information to healthcare professionals and stakeholders to improve drug utilization and policymaking.
    • At this position, I’ve been able to investigate and analyze the factors causing the actual epidemics of irrational drug use and inequity in access to essential drugs that co-exist in middle-income countries like Colombia.
  • These problems are accentuated by the absence of a strong national pharmaceutical policy and the extensive influence of pharmaceutical industry in legislators and their neoliberal policies.
    • Moreover, my experience in France has brought to me a whole new vision of pharmaceutical policies as this country is experiencing a fast evolution in medicines regulation since the globally known mediator scandal -an anorectic drug marketed as an antidiabetic-, which has caused almost 1300 deaths because of heart valve disease.
  • These regulations include hard restrictions on off-label drug use and more stringent pharmacovigilance legislation.
    • In fact, my master’s research project would be probably based in the former subject and would be realized jointly with the Colombian and French research groups that I belong to.
    • For these reasons I would be an honor to me to be able to assist to the summer course.
    • I would be a unique opportunity for me to hear the view of international experts in the field and to be able to contribute to the discussion from my experience both in Colombia and in France.
  • Yours faithfully,

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • I am a Colombian graduated pharmacist and I’m currently completing a master’s degree of public health (1st year) at the Paris Diderot University and an internship in the Paris region’ pharmacoepidemiology center.
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    • I am a Colombian graduated pharmacistPharmacist Graduate and I’m currently completing a master’s degree of public health (1st year) at the Paris Diderot University and an internship in the Paris region’ pharmacoepidemiology center.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 3VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 3
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    • I’m particularly passionate in deepening my knowledge about the impact of medicines on public health and I would like to focus my career in developing multidisciplinary solutions to global problematics in this field .
      Stem nou!
    • I’m particularly passionate inabout deepening my knowledge aboutof the impact of medicines on public health and I would like to focus my career in developing multidisciplinary solutions to global problematics in this field .
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 5VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 5
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    • Indeed, since summer 2010, I work as the chief editor and writer for the bulletin of the Drug Information Center of the Colombia’s National University (CIMUN), which is a member of the International Society of Drug Bulletins (ISDB).
      Stem nou!
    • Indeed, since summer 2010, I have worked as the chief editor and writer for the bulletin of the Drug Information Center of thein OR AT Colombia’s National University (CIMUN), which is a member of the International Society of Drug Bulletins (ISDB).
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 6VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 6
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    • CIMUN’s bulletin intends to deliver rigorous, critical and independent information to healthcare professionals and stakeholders to improve drug utilization and policymaking.
      Stem nou!
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 7VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 7
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    • At this position, I’ve been able to investigate and analyze the factors causing the actual epidemics of irrational drug use and inequity in access to essential drugs that co-exist in middle-income countries like Colombia.
      Stem nou!
    • At this position, I’ve been able to investigate and analyze the factors causing the actual epidemics of irrational drug use and inequity in access to essential drugs that co-exist in middle-income countries like Colombia.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 8VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 8
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    • These problems are accentuated by the absence of a strong national pharmaceutical policy and the extensive influence of pharmaceutical industry in legislators and their neoliberal policies.
      Stem nou!
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 9VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 9
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    • Moreover, my experience in France has brought to me a whole new vision of pharmaceutical policies as this country is experiencing a fast evolution in medicines regulation since the globally known mediator scandal -an anorectic drug marketed as an antidiabetic-, which has caused almost 1300 deaths because of heart valve disease.
      Stem nou!
    • Moreover, my experience in France has brought to me a whole new vision of pharmaceutical policies as this country is experiencing a fathe fastest evolution in medicines regulation since the globally known mediator scandal -an anorectic drug marketed as an antidiabetic-, which has caused almost 1300 deaths because of heart valve disease.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 10VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 10
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    • In fact, my master’s research project would be probably based in the former subject and would be realized jointly with the Colombian and French research groups that I belong to.
      Stem nou!
    • In fact, my master’s research project would be probably be based ion the former subject and would be realized jointly with the Colombian and French research groups that I belong to.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 12VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 12
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    • I would be a unique opportunity for me to hear the view of international experts in the field and to be able to contribute to the discussion from my experience both in Colombia and in France.
      Stem nou!
    • It would be a unique opportunity for me to hear the view of international experts in the field and to be able to contribute to the discussion from my experience both in Colombia and in France.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 14VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 14
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