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    • THE ELDERLY PARTY WAS A REALLY SUCCESS I would like to respond to the article published in the last week edition.
    • It criticised very hardly different aspects of the elderly party organized by our college.
  • But none of them are true.
  • Therefore, I would like to explain how the party was carried out.
    • The article said the comedian Jimmy Jones made the public bored to stiff but the situation was rather different.
  • Old people enjoyed a lot with him and most of them asked the college in order to hire this comedian.
    • Another point I would like to clarify is that elderly people were not able to dance jazz because this kind of music is not suitable for them.
    • However, old people begged if we as the organizers of the party, could bring a group of jazz due to the fact that they loved it.
    • To top it all, I would like to talk about the food we served during lunch.
    • It could be possible some people complained about it but most of them told to the organizers the food was incredibly tasty.
    • To conclusion, I am pleased you have given to me the opportunity to clarify all of these aspects about the elderly party and I request you next time check and ask the organizers any questions before you publish an article. Sincerely

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    • THE ELDERLY PARTY WAS A REALLY SUCCESS I would like to respond to the article published in the last week edition.
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    • THE ELDERLY PARTY WAS A REALLY SUCCESS¶¶I would like to respond to the article published in the last week's edition.
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    • The article said the comedian Jimmy Jones made the public bored to stiff but the situation was rather different.
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    • The article said the comedian Jimmy Jones made the public bored to stiffdeath but the situation was rather different.
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    • Another point I would like to clarify is that elderly people were not able to dance jazz because this kind of music is not suitable for them.
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    • Another point that I would like to clarify is that elderly people were not able to dance in jazz music because this kind of music is not suitable for them.
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    • However, old people begged if we as the organizers of the party, could bring a group of jazz due to the fact that they loved it.
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    • However, old people begged us if we as the organizers of the party, could bring a group of jazz musicians due to the fact that they loved it.
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    • It could be possible some people complained about it but most of them told to the organizers the food was incredibly tasty.
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    • It could be possible that some people complained about it but most of them told to the organizers that the food was incredibly tasty.
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    • To conclusion, I am pleased you have given to me the opportunity to clarify all of these aspects about the elderly party and I request you next time check and ask the organizers any questions before you publish an article. Sincerely
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    • ToIn conclusion, I am pleased that you have given to me the opportunity to clarify all of these aspects about the elderly party and I request you to check next time check and ask the organizers any questions before you publish an article. Sincerely your's
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