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    • Hypersexualization of children

    • One day, I took the bus in Cholet, and as always I’m bored but more than usually because I hadn't take my headphones.
    • So after some time, a little girl go up in the bus and she was staying opposite to me.
    • At this moment she was in front of me, so I was forced to look her.
    • And I was really shocked because she was dressed like a woman while she looks like 10 years old.
    • She brought black mini skirt with jean jacket and high-heel and I let you imagine her makeup.
    • I was terribly shocked because I know it exist but I never really see that in reality.
  • And probably because I’m already worried when I see my little sister.
    • But I say that because, it’s the reason why we decided to talk about hypersexualization.
    • The Hypersexualization is a behaviour with a sexual character.
    • Is a phenomen of society whose young teenagers adopt attitudes and sexual behaviour considered too precocious.
    • (It’s an excessive strategy focus on a body in order to charm and appear like a model of sexuality, simplistic spread by industries across medias.
    • Furthermore it’s inspired of stereotype which result from pornography.
    • We talk about dominant man and enchantress submissive object women.) There a lot consequences : the social society spread some “rules”.
    • Today, we living in society where when your are women, we have to be sexy for be great.
    • A big part of publicity and clip encourage young people enter into sexuality too soon.
  • Furthermore, we are in a world where there is “sex business”.
    • In fact, lot of business is focus on sex but for little girls.
    • Yes they had dare !
    • They sell hight heel from 0 to 6 months and more, brassiere from 4 years old or padded brassiere from 6 to 10 years old, string and bikini as 7 years old and t-shirt or sweater with doubtful text like “Born to be a sexy” or “If you think i’m a bitch … you should meet my mother”.
    • The business encourage a hypersexualization also with toys for children or beauty salon which are open from 6 years old and integral waxing.
  • It is called “Virgin waxing”.
    • But for more developpement we will talk about hypersexualisation in two parts : 1- Evolution of hypersexualisation in society 2- Consequences and solution Before, I want to precise that we have decided to talk about hypersexualisation in general, there is not specific country in our developpement.
    • But if it's the case, don’t worry, we will tell you.
    • I- Analysis of hypersexualization in society First, hypersexualization of children, especially young girls, is consequence of society.
    • Indeed, when we look TV or music video, we understand faster why our daughters, sisters or others little girls in our entourage are very differents (physically) than the ones twenty years ago.
  • Look at this photo (1)!
    • Miley Cyrus is a model for an entire generation of girls : she was begun as actress in a famous serie : “Hannah Montana”.
    • It’s difficult for little viewers to make the difference between Miley before, and Miley now: it’s too late because there were an irreversible identification.
  • Moreover, it’s just an example of influence.
    • We can talk about TV, with reality TV : languorous kisses in a bath, “perfect women” with big boobs… so many things that could be influence children or teenagers.
    • These cause a distorded vision of what a woman have to be.
    • Some evolutions could be noteworthy : the famous “Barbie” (2) changes her look to be more “normal”, but, in our opinion, it’s too late… The damage is already done!
    • But, perhaps grandchildren will have the chance to have a realistic example… Some people use the argument of trend, fashion, to justified that our daughter wear high-heel or lipstick.
    • However, these can’t be an excuse!
    • It’s ridiculous to say that “Yes, I authorize my child to do that, because all parents autorise this thing”.
    • So, if all parents autorise their children to have sexual relations because of trend, you autorise this too?
    • Very shocking in our mind… The responsibility is attributable on parents, and not society : indeed, it’s parents plus parents plus parents who constitutes society!!
    • But sometimes, we can say that unfortunately, parents are responsible of their children.
    • In fact, in general, mothers realise their dreams across their daughter’s eyes.
    • (4) that why some little girl participate of a little miss contest.
    • It’s a beauty contest for little girl aged between 2 years 16 years old.
    • As young age, this little girls have hairdressers and put false nails, fake eyelash or remove hair integrally while they don’t achieve their puberty.
    • They learn to be sexy, while at this age we can’t understand this word.
    • They learn remain (se tenir) and put make up.
    • Little girls doesn’t look likes children anymore but dolls without defect.

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    • One day, I took the bus in Cholet, and as always I’m bored but more than usually because I hadn't take my headphones.
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    • One day, I took the bus in Cholet, and a. As always, I’m bored, but more so than usually, because I hadn't taken my headphones.
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    • And I was really shocked because she was dressed like a woman while she looks like 10 years old.
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    • And I was really shocked, because she was dressed like a woman while she looks likebut was only about 10 years old.
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    • She brought black mini skirt with jean jacket and high-heel and I let you imagine her makeup.
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    • She broughtwas wearing a black mini skirt with jeanpaired with a denim jacket and high- heel and Is. I'll let you imagine her make-up.
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    • I was terribly shocked because I know it exist but I never really see that in reality.
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    • I was terribly shocked because I know it existew some children were dressed and made up like that, but I had never really seen that in reality.
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    • Is a phenomen of society whose young teenagers adopt attitudes and sexual behaviour considered too precocious.
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    • It's a phenomenon of a society whosere young teenagers adopt precocious attitudes and sexual behaviour considered too precocious.
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    • (It’s an excessive strategy focus on a body in order to charm and appear like a model of sexuality, simplistic spread by industries across medias.
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    • (It’s an excessive focus strategy focus on a body in order to charm and appear like a model of sexuality, simplisticand to represent sexuality that has been spread by industries across the medias.
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    • We talk about dominant man and enchantress submissive object women.) There a lot consequences : the social society spread some “rules”.
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    • We talk about the dominant man and enchantressthe submissive object womenenchantress or women as objects.)¶¶There are a lot of consequences : the: social society spreads some “rules”.
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    • Today, we living in society where when your are women, we have to be sexy for be great.
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    • Today, we are living in a society where, when your are're a women, weyou have to be sexy forto be greatwidely accepted.
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    • A big part of publicity and clip encourage young people enter into sexuality too soon.
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    • A big part of publicity and clipsection of the media and publicity encourages young people enter intoto become preoccupied with their sexuality too soon.
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    • They sell hight heel from 0 to 6 months and more, brassiere from 4 years old or padded brassiere from 6 to 10 years old, string and bikini as 7 years old and t-shirt or sweater with doubtful text like “Born to be a sexy” or “If you think i’m a bitch … you should meet my mother”.
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    • They sell hight heels for children aged from 0 to 6 months and morabove, brassiere from can be bought for 4 years old ors and padded brassiere from for 6 to 10 years olds, strithongs and bikini ass for 7 years olds and t-shirts or sweaters with doubtful textquestionable messages like “Born to be a sexy” or “If you think iI’m a bitch … you should meet my mother”.
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    • The business encourage a hypersexualization also with toys for children or beauty salon which are open from 6 years old and integral waxing.
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    • The bBusinesses also encourage a hypersexualization also with toys for children or beauty salon which are open from 6 years offering services such as Hold and integral waxinglywood waxing/Brazilian waxing which can be used by 6 year olds.
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    • But for more developpement we will talk about hypersexualisation in two parts : 1- Evolution of hypersexualisation in society 2- Consequences and solution Before, I want to precise that we have decided to talk about hypersexualisation in general, there is not specific country in our developpement.
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    • But for more developpementIn order to develop this idea further, we will talk about hypersexualisation in two parts : ¶¶1- EThe evolution of hypersexualisation in society ¶2- CIts consequences and solution s¶¶Before we start, I want to preciseclarify that we have decided to talk about hypersexualisation in general, there is notnot in a specific country in our developpementor society.
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    • I- Analysis of hypersexualization in society First, hypersexualization of children, especially young girls, is consequence of society.
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    • I- An analysis of hypersexualization in society ¶¶First,ly, the hypersexualization of children, especially young girls, is a consequence of society.
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    • Indeed, when we look TV or music video, we understand faster why our daughters, sisters or others little girls in our entourage are very differents (physically) than the ones twenty years ago.
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    • Indeed, when we lookwatch TV or music videos, we quickly begin to understand faster why our daughters, sisters orand others little girls in our entouragearound us are very differents (physically) than the oneo girls twenty years ago.
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    • Miley Cyrus is a model for an entire generation of girls : she was begun as actress in a famous serie : “Hannah Montana”.
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    • Miley Cyrus is a role model for an entire generation of girls : she was begunstarted her career as an actress in athe famous serie :s “Hannah Montana”.
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    • It’s difficult for little viewers to make the difference between Miley before, and Miley now: it’s too late because there were an irreversible identification.
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    • It’s difficult for littleyounger viewers to make the differenctiate between Miley before, and Miley now: it’s too late because there were an irreversible identification. Nothing can be done: the two Mileys are irreversibly linked.
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    • We can talk about TV, with reality TV : languorous kisses in a bath, “perfect women” with big boobs… so many things that could be influence children or teenagers.
      투표하세요!
    • We can talk about TV, withespecially reality TV : laonguor-drawn-oust kisses in a bath, “perfect women” with big boobs… so many things that could be influence children or teenagers.
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    • Some evolutions could be noteworthy : the famous “Barbie” (2) changes her look to be more “normal”, but, in our opinion, it’s too late… The damage is already done!
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    • Some devolutionelopments could be noteworthy :, like the changing of the famous “Barbie” (2) changesdoll. They have tried to make her look to be more “normal”, but, in our opinion, it’s too late… Tthe damage is already done!
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    • But, perhaps grandchildren will have the chance to have a realistic example… Some people use the argument of trend, fashion, to justified that our daughter wear high-heel or lipstick.
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    • ButNevertheless, perhaps our grandchildren will have the chance to have abenefit from dolls with realistic examplebody types… ¶¶Some people use the argument of trend,s and fashion, to justified thaty our daughters wearing high- heels or lipstick.
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    • It’s ridiculous to say that “Yes, I authorize my child to do that, because all parents autorise this thing”.
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    • It’s ridiculous to say that “Yes, I authorizellow my child to do that, because all parents autorise this thingllow it”.
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    • So, if all parents autorise their children to have sexual relations because of trend, you autorise this too?
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    • So, if all parents autorisellow their children to have sexual relations because of a trend, you autorise thiswould you allow it too?
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    • Very shocking in our mind… The responsibility is attributable on parents, and not society : indeed, it’s parents plus parents plus parents who constitutes society!!
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    • Very shocking in, to our mind… The responsibility is attributable on parentsit is the parents' responsibility, and not society : i's! Indeed, it’s parents plus parents plus parents who constitutesthat make up our society!!
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    • But sometimes, we can say that unfortunately, parents are responsible of their children.
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    • ButHowever, sometimes, we can say that it is unfortunately, that parents arhave sole responsible ofility for their children.
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    • As young age, this little girls have hairdressers and put false nails, fake eyelash or remove hair integrally while they don’t achieve their puberty.
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    • AEven at this young age, thisese little girls have hairdressers and put on false nails, and fake eyelash or remove hair integrally while they don’t achieve theires and have Brazilian waxes, despite the fact that many of them have not yet reached puberty.
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    • They learn to be sexy, while at this age we can’t understand this word.
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    • They learn to be sexy, while at this age we can’t understand this wordAlthough they cannot possibly understand the word at such a young age, they learn to be "sexy".
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