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    • SOULD DEVELOPING COUNTRIES CONCENTRATE ON IMPROVING INDUSTRIAL

    • First of all, I want to precise that both of two politics are vey important for all the countries, and a serious government , in my opinion, should not appear the discussion in these terms.
    • To improve the whealth and the standard of living in a country, in a immediate way, a government obtains his recourses by improving industrial skills more quickly.
    • This way the employment rate increases and is lower the necessity if foreign investiments.
    • But, on the other hand , the only way, to my seem, of maintaining the standard of living in a country is investing in education, creating the bases so that this population could develop his studies in the own country, in the future.
    • Otherwise the whole investiment would get lost, being part of the whealth of other countries.
    • To finish, if I woud to choose , I would prefer investing in education first, because I think is the better option in the long term.

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    • First of all, I want to precise that both of two politics are vey important for all the countries, and a serious government , in my opinion, should not appear the discussion in these terms.
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    • First of all, I want to precisesay that both of two politics are very important for all the countries, and a serious government , in my opinion, should not appearhesitate in the discussion inof these terms.
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    • First of all, I want to precisemake it clear that both of the two politicscies presented in this paper are very important forin all the countries, and a serious government , in my opinion, should not appear the discussion in these termshesitate to engage in discussions regarding each of them.
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    • To improve the whealth and the standard of living in a country, in a immediate way, a government obtains his recourses by improving industrial skills more quickly.
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    • To improve the whealth and the standard of living in a country, in an immediate way, a government obtains hits recsoursces by improving industrial skills more quickly.
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    • Tohe standard governmental course of action to immediately improveing the whealth and the standard of living in a country, in a immediate way, a government obtains his recourses bs to quickly improvinge industrial skills more quickly.
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    • This way the employment rate increases and is lower the necessity if foreign investiments.
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    • This way the employment rate increases and ist lowers the necessity iof foreign investiments.
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    • This wayincreases the employment rate increases and is lower the necessity ifwhile simultaneously reducing the country's dependence on foreign investiments.
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    • But, on the other hand , the only way, to my seem, of maintaining the standard of living in a country is investing in education, creating the bases so that this population could develop his studies in the own country, in the future.
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    • But, on the other hand , the only way, toin my seemopinion, of maintaining the standard of living in a country is by investing in education, creating the bases so that this population could develop hits studies in theits own country, in the future.
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    • But, on the other hand , the only way, to my seem, of maintaining the I see to successfully maintain a decent standard of living in a country is by investing in education, thereby creating the bases so that this population could develop his studies in the own country, in the futurepopulation's foundation for the country's future development of it's own studies domestically.
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    • Otherwise the whole investiment would get lost, being part of the whealth of other countries.
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    • Otherwise the whole investiment would get lost, becoming part of the whealth of other countries.
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    • Otherwise, the whole investiment would get lost, being part offrastructure of the country would crumble as it gets exploited by the whealth of othery countries.
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    • To finish, if I woud to choose , I would prefer investing in education first, because I think is the better option in the long term.
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    • To finish, if I wcould to choose , I would prefer investing in education first, because I think it is the bestter option in the long term. ¶
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    • To finish, if I woud to choose I want to say that, given the choice, I would prefer investing heavily in education firstrom the start instead of in industrial skills, because I think it is the better option in the long term. run.
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