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    • Many people protest, because they think that they can change the world.
    • Nowadays there are many different forms of protests.
    • But which is the most successful form?
    • In the following comment I will give you the answer of this question.
    • The first form of a protest is the creative protest.
  • People feel free to show their opinion with creative ideas.
    • One popular possibility is the flash mob.
    • Many people meet at a certain time at a certain place for this action.
    • And then they begin to dance for example.
  • But you can also dress up or make posters.
  • The second type is the violent protest.
  • It’s a dangerous form of a protest, because it often uses violence and ignores rights and laws.
  • And the last form of protests is the Pie-in-the-face protest.
  • This form often has a political background.
  • The pie thrower usually uses this form as a response to some act or policy they are involved with.
  • In my opinion the violent protests and the pie-in-the-face protests aren’t as much effective as the creative protests, because they don’t achieve so much.
    • Protestors sometimes break the laws and rights, so that they could lose their jobs or get arrested.
  • With a protest you always have to change the people’s mind and I believe that you can’t change somebody’s opinion with violence or the pie-in-the-face action.
    • However with the creative protest you get much attention and set a sign.
  • People think about the protest, so that it’s more possible to get supporters.
    • I’m also of the opinion, that not all types of protests are legitimate under certain circumstances.
    • Particularly violence isn’t a solution, no matter what the situation looks like.
  • I think it makes more problems than it solves and there is always a better way to show your dissatisfaction, like the creative protest.
  • In conclusion you can say that there is no doubt that the creative protest is the most successful form to show your opinion and to get supporters.
  • With your creative ideas you get much attention and set a sign in the world.
  • For this reason I would protest in this way, maybe about animal cruelty or to show people that we have to save our world.

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