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Сообщение от Brocky - English

  • The importance of progress in our lives.

  • Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
  • Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
  • Acquiring knowledge in any field has to be achieved by dividing the goal into small steps.
  • An individual would not know that he's going to make his dream come true if he did not follow this rule.
    • It is believed that progress that we make is not all the time good.
    • In my humble opinion, being part of the group of thought that holds the view of the improvement is an essential key factor in any aspect of life for two main reasons.
  • Firstly, it would make you feel happy about yourself.
  • It would also give you a feeling that your life has a meaning.
    • Instead of failing each time and whiping like a widowd woman, it would be better for a person to strive to make his dreams realized.
  • How could a person know that he's on the right track without making any improvement in his work?
  • It's a given that an individual must follow certain patterns in order to achieve what he's aiming for.
  • For example, when I started preparing for my TOEFL exam 5 weeks ago, at first everything was hard for me.
  • Starting from the reading section till the writing section, I had no background on it.
  • Day by day, I settled a plan in order to be able to tackle it.
    • If it was not the progress that I made, I would definitely relinquish passing this exam due to its harship.
    • What made me not to lose hope is the improvement that I get each time from the preperation that I did.
    • Now, Im comfortable to defeat as a resut of the help of the progress that I made.
  • As you can see, it is very necessary for us to keep the improvement in order to feel happy and achieve what we're yearning for.
    • Secondly, it would push you to other challenges in life that you are capable of handling them, but because of fear you hesitate each time.
    • That's why we need it, it is helpful in an increase once confident and leting him know his real potential that he has deep inside him.
    • For instance, after my TOELF preperation that I have went through, now I am ready to score highly on my next coming exams in my graduation school.
  • Because, I know that nothing can hold me from realizing what I am looking for.
    • It is not limited to only certain people, but anyone can get what he wants if he put a plan, and start making progress in it.
  • As you can see, once we make a step further in our projects, it pushes us to look for more challenges.
  • To conclude, life is a game.
    • Only the successful people know how to defeat it in order to get what they want.
    • One of the essential element in their secret formula is once a person make progress in his projects.
    • I highly encourage people to find a way how to start working on their goals in their lives, and put a plan for it that has to divide the work into little improvement that has to be done each time.
    • So, they can asure achievement them.

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