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  • The importance of progress in our lives.

  • Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good?
  • Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
  • Acquiring knowledge in any field has to be achieved by dividing the goal into small steps.
  • An individual would not know that he's going to make his dream come true if he did not follow this rule.
    • It is believed that progress that we make is not all the time good.
    • In my humble opinion, being part of the group of thought that holds the view of the improvement is an essential key factor in any aspect of life for two main reasons.
  • Firstly, it would make you feel happy about yourself.
  • It would also give you a feeling that your life has a meaning.
    • Instead of failing each time and whiping like a widowd woman, it would be better for a person to strive to make his dreams realized.
  • How could a person know that he's on the right track without making any improvement in his work?
  • It's a given that an individual must follow certain patterns in order to achieve what he's aiming for.
  • For example, when I started preparing for my TOEFL exam 5 weeks ago, at first everything was hard for me.
  • Starting from the reading section till the writing section, I had no background on it.
  • Day by day, I settled a plan in order to be able to tackle it.
    • If it was not the progress that I made, I would definitely relinquish passing this exam due to its harship.
    • What made me not to lose hope is the improvement that I get each time from the preperation that I did.
    • Now, Im comfortable to defeat as a resut of the help of the progress that I made.
  • As you can see, it is very necessary for us to keep the improvement in order to feel happy and achieve what we're yearning for.
    • Secondly, it would push you to other challenges in life that you are capable of handling them, but because of fear you hesitate each time.
    • That's why we need it, it is helpful in an increase once confident and leting him know his real potential that he has deep inside him.
    • For instance, after my TOELF preperation that I have went through, now I am ready to score highly on my next coming exams in my graduation school.
  • Because, I know that nothing can hold me from realizing what I am looking for.
    • It is not limited to only certain people, but anyone can get what he wants if he put a plan, and start making progress in it.
  • As you can see, once we make a step further in our projects, it pushes us to look for more challenges.
  • To conclude, life is a game.
    • Only the successful people know how to defeat it in order to get what they want.
    • One of the essential element in their secret formula is once a person make progress in his projects.
    • I highly encourage people to find a way how to start working on their goals in their lives, and put a plan for it that has to divide the work into little improvement that has to be done each time.
    • So, they can asure achievement them.

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    • In my humble opinion, being part of the group of thought that holds the view of the improvement is an essential key factor in any aspect of life for two main reasons.
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    • In my humble opinion, being part of the group of thought that holds the view of thethat improvement is (always) good is an essential key factor in any aspect of life for two main reasons.
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    • Instead of failing each time and whiping like a widowd woman, it would be better for a person to strive to make his dreams realized.
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    • Instead of failing each time and whieeping like a widowed woman, it would be better for a person to strive to make his dreams realized.
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    • If it was not the progress that I made, I would definitely relinquish passing this exam due to its harship.
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    • If it was not the progress that I made, I would definitely relinquishfail passing this exam due to its harshipdifficulty.
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    • What made me not to lose hope is the improvement that I get each time from the preperation that I did.
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    • What made me not to lose hope is the improvement that I geot each time from the preperation that I didI prepared well for it.
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    • As you can see, it is very necessary for us to keep the improvement in order to feel happy and achieve what we're yearning for.
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    • Secondly, it would push you to other challenges in life that you are capable of handling them, but because of fear you hesitate each time.
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    • Secondly, it would push you tomotivate you to accept other challenges in life that you are capable of handling them, but because of fear you hesitate each time.
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    • That's why we need it, it is helpful in an increase once confident and leting him know his real potential that he has deep inside him.
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    • That's why we need it, it is helpful in anto increase once's confidentce and letting him know his real potential that he has deep inside (of) him.
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    • For instance, after my TOELF preperation that I have went through, now I am ready to score highly on my next coming exams in my graduation school.
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    • For instance, after my TOELF preperation that I have went through, now I am now ready to score highly on my next coming exams in my graduatione school.
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    • It is not limited to only certain people, but anyone can get what he wants if he put a plan, and start making progress in it.
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    • It is not limited to only certaina few people, but anyone can get what he wants if he putmakes a plan, and start making progress in it.
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    • One of the essential element in their secret formula is once a person make progress in his projects.
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    • One of the essential elements in their secret formula is once a personthe motivation to make progress in histheir projects/goals.
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    • I highly encourage people to find a way how to start working on their goals in their lives, and put a plan for it that has to divide the work into little improvement that has to be done each time.
      투표하세요!
    • I highly encourage people to find a way how to start working on their goals in their lives, and putmake a plan for it that has to divide the work into little improvement that has to be done each time.
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