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  • Investing in computer technology

  • Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology.
  • Other people disagree and think that this money should be spent on more basic needs.
  • Which one of these opinions do you agree with?
  • Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
    • Computer technology is one of the main cores of technology that stands on.
    • With the explosion of the population and the desire for looking to possess more materials that would make life easier than before.
    • New investements were been proposed on developing the computer science and its different aspects.
    • On the other hand, there are views oppose this vision, and belief that the money would be spend in this field would better utilized on basic needs.
    • Being part of group of thoughts that support improving technology is an ideal choice for two main reasons.
    • Firstly, it will help in cultivating the local economy of the country by opening more business fractions which is going to lead for more job opportunities to help unemployed workers to support themselves and their families.
  • For example, when I was attending university in Batna, I was studying safety engineering.
    • I had to find a job to finance myself in order to fulfill most of the requirement that needed in daily life.
    • I had looked at different jobs before, but it was in vain, till when the goverment announced that some centers for comupter development will be opened after two weeks.
    • From then I applied for part time job in the center, and luckily I was accepted due to the potential that I have in this field.
  • It was related somehow to my background studies, which helped me not only in inquiring an experience but also in deepening my knowledge in this field.
  • The second reason would be that it would make life more easier for people.
    • As a matter a fact, it became an important element in many poeple's lives as improving their health conditions through using developed equipments in the hospitals.
    • Technology has lead to many break through in the recent decades as find cures to hard diseases, installing high technology pieces in the bodies of the individuals who lost control over their legs.
    • It was an ideal solution for many delimmas that people was having trouble with.
    • Nowadays because of technology you can drive home safely by puting auto drive mode and relax in your car watching movies , listen to radios, speaking on phones with family and friends.
    • If there had more investements in this field, it would definitely help a lot the society to flourish.
  • To conclude, it is been argued that focusing on technology rather than basic needs would not help the society.
  • Whereas from what can we see from the benefits that technology has brought to us through the last decades, it would be absurd to deny these facts.
  • I highly encourage the government to step up further in increasing more opportunities either by purchasing or improving computer technology for the sake of having an utopian community.

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    • Some people think that governments should spend as much money as possible on developing or buying computer technology.
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    • With the explosion of the population and the desire for looking to possess more materials that would make life easier than before.
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    • With tThe explosion of the population and the desire for lookinghas created a desire to possess more materials that would make life easier than before.
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    • On the other hand, there are views oppose this vision, and belief that the money would be spend in this field would better utilized on basic needs.
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    • On the other hand, there are views that oppose this vision, and beliefve that the money would be spendt in this field would be better utilized on basic needs.
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    • Firstly, it will help in cultivating the local economy of the country by opening more business fractions which is going to lead for more job opportunities to help unemployed workers to support themselves and their families.
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    • Firstly, it will help in cultivating the local economy of the country by opening more business fractions, which is going to lead for more job opportunities to help unemployed workers to support themselves and their families.
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    • I had looked at different jobs before, but it was in vain, till when the goverment announced that some centers for comupter development will be opened after two weeks.
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    • I had looked at different jobs before, but it was in vain, untill when the government announced that some centers for comuputer development will be opened after two weeks.
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    • From then I applied for part time job in the center, and luckily I was accepted due to the potential that I have in this field.
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    • From then I applied for a part time job in the center, and luckily I was accepted due to the potential that I have in this field.
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    • It was related somehow to my background studies, which helped me not only in inquiring an experience but also in deepening my knowledge in this field.
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    • As a matter a fact, it became an important element in many poeple's lives as improving their health conditions through using developed equipments in the hospitals.
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    • As a matter aof fact, it became an important element in many poeople's lives as is improving their health conditions through using developed equipments in the hospitals.
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    • Technology has lead to many break through in the recent decades as find cures to hard diseases, installing high technology pieces in the bodies of the individuals who lost control over their legs.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • Technology has lead to many break throughs in the recent decades such as finding cures to hard diseases, and installing high technology pieces in the bodies of the individuals who lost control over their legs.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentit
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    • Nowadays because of technology you can drive home safely by puting auto drive mode and relax in your car watching movies , listen to radios, speaking on phones with family and friends.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • Nowadays because of technology you can drive home safely by putting it into auto drive mode and relax in your car watching movies , listening to the radios, and speaking on the phones with family and friends.
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    • Whereas from what can we see from the benefits that technology has brought to us through the last decades, it would be absurd to deny these facts.
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    • I highly encourage the government to step up further in increasing more opportunities either by purchasing or improving computer technology for the sake of having an utopian community.
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