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  • Should students take art and music on high school?

  • Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
  • All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
  • Use specific reasons to support your answer.
    • Learning is an essential element for students of all different ages.
    • Secondary school is one of the most important time for the students development to profound their basic knowledge.
    • There are some people who believe that all the students must take art and music classes, others argue that it is not important for all the students to to take music and art classes.
    • In my opinion, music and art should not imposed on all the students to take them for two reasons.
    • Firstly, learning about art and music in secondary school is nothing but a waste of time for the majority of the students, instead of putting lot of time on these classes, it would be better for them to take more fundamental classes such as mathematic, chemistry and science.
    • These are truly time worth it to spend on them.
  • For example, when I was attending secondary school in Batna, 8 years ago, I took a class in music.
    • The teacher used to explain to take us through history of the music and how the scales were introduced, and the achievement of bithoven that he made in this field even though that he lost his hearing on the age of forty.
    • I didn't not benefit from all the topics were introduced, and I wish If had taken another like physic, it would had been an investement for me.
    • Through time I would definitely need all the aspects that I would learn in this classes, especially in high school and university.
    • As you can see, music and art are not big deal for students to take in secondary school, but rather it would be considered a waste of times and efforts.
    • Secondly, there are students who consider art and music boring classes to take.
    • It would be unfair to force them to learn things which they have no passion towards.
    • Whereas, they can be more productive in classes such as science and biology and it would be a shame if they did not take advantage on their time to learn more about them.
    • For instance, I had a friend who had studied in a different secondrary school that I was attending before he moved to my high school that I was studying in.
    • When I opened the discussion with him on his desires for learning about classes, he replied that engineering is an impeccable field for him to take and focus all of his efforts on.
    • He argued that when we go to work, we would not be asked about what things on music or art, but rather we would more concerned with helping the lives of people by designing safe houses and departement, by enhancing the gases that cars use in order to protect the envirnoment and people's health.
    • To conclude, study is vital for the students' brains in order to keep them thrive and flourish.
    • There are variety of classes offered in different stages of learning.
    • Some people like that students should take classes in art and music, others prefer going into other classes.
    • I believe that students should not be forced to take classes in art and music because not only would they find them boring, but also they would waste their times and efforts while studying them.

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    • Secondary school is one of the most important time for the students development to profound their basic knowledge.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Secondary school is one of the most important time for thes in a student's development to profounddeepen their basic knowledge.
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    • There are some people who believe that all the students must take art and music classes, others argue that it is not important for all the students to to take music and art classes.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • There are some people who believe that all the students must take art and music classes, while others argue that it is not important for all the students to to take music and art classes.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
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    • Firstly, learning about art and music in secondary school is nothing but a waste of time for the majority of the students, instead of putting lot of time on these classes, it would be better for them to take more fundamental classes such as mathematic, chemistry and science.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Firstly, learning about art and music in secondary school is nothing but a waste of time for the majority of the students, i. Instead of putting a lot of time inton these classes, it would be better for them to take more fundamental classes such as mathematics, chemistry and science.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
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    • The teacher used to explain to take us through history of the music and how the scales were introduced, and the achievement of bithoven that he made in this field even though that he lost his hearing on the age of forty.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • The teacher used to explain to take us through the history of the music and, how the scales were introduced, and theBeethoven's achievement of bithoven that he made in this field even though that hehe had lost his hearing onby the age of forty.
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    • I didn't not benefit from all the topics were introduced, and I wish If had taken another like physic, it would had been an investement for me.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I didn't not benefit from all the topics that were introduced, and I wish If had taken another course like physic, is. It would hadve been an bigger investement for me.
    • I didn't not benefit from all the topics that were introduced, and I wish Ithink that, if had taken another like physics, it would hadve been an better investement for me.
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    • Through time I would definitely need all the aspects that I would learn in this classes, especially in high school and university.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ThroughOver time I would definitely need all the aspects that I would learn in this classes, especially in high school and university.
    • ThroughOver time, I would definitely need all the aspects that I would learn in thisese classes, especially in high school and university.
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    • As you can see, music and art are not big deal for students to take in secondary school, but rather it would be considered a waste of times and efforts.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • As you can see, music and art areit is not a big deal for students to take music and art in secondary school, but rather it would be considered a waste of times and efforts.
    • As you can see, music and art are not a big deal for students to take in secondary school, but rather it would be considered a waste of times and efforts.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
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    • Whereas, they can be more productive in classes such as science and biology and it would be a shame if they did not take advantage on their time to learn more about them.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Whereas, they can be more productive in classes such as science and biology and it would be a shame if they did not take advantage onf their time to learn more about them.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17
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    • For instance, I had a friend who had studied in a different secondrary school that I was attending before he moved to my high school that I was studying in.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • For instance, I had a friend who had studied inat a different secondrary school thatn I was attending before he moved to my high school that I was studying in.
    • For instance, I had a friend who had studied in a different secondrary school to the one that I was attending, before he moved to my high school that I was studying in.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
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    • When I opened the discussion with him on his desires for learning about classes, he replied that engineering is an impeccable field for him to take and focus all of his efforts on.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • When I opened the discussion with him on whis desires for learning about classesch classes he wanted to take, he replied that engineering is an impeccable field for him to take and focus all of his efforts on.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
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    • He argued that when we go to work, we would not be asked about what things on music or art, but rather we would more concerned with helping the lives of people by designing safe houses and departement, by enhancing the gases that cars use in order to protect the envirnoment and people's health.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • He argued that when we gowent to work, we would not be asked about what things onsuch as music or art, but rather we would be more concerned with helping othe lives of peoplers by designing safe houses and deapartements, by enhancing the gases that cars use and by ,in order to protect the envirnoment and people's health, enhancing the gases that cars use.
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    • I believe that students should not be forced to take classes in art and music because not only would they find them boring, but also they would waste their times and efforts while studying them.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I believe that students should not be forced to take classes in art and music because not only would they find them boring, but also they would also waste their times and efforts while by studying them.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24