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  • The most important thing that happened in the last 10 decades.

  • With the increase of the human poplutation all over the world, there are many improvement happend in life, and many events occured in the last 10 decades.
  • In my view, I believe the most important event that happened in this time is the developement of technology and its integration in our lives for two reasons.
  • First, it helped us in saving more lives and reducing death's rate.
  • Especially the one used in the surgeries and in treatement of diseases.
  • For example, before 100 years ago, there were a lot of diseases spread all over the world, it caused an enourmous destruction to the population.
  • It was hard to figure out the remedy for them nor even knowning their causes.
  • And with the advancement in technology, we have now remedies for cancer diseases with its different types.
  • And also for the HIV virus, that was the horrific nightmare ever was been lived by humanity.
  • And people now can even live with these type of diseases without effecting their bodies, by disabelling their functions in the cells, and stop them from reproduction and infecting other areas.
  • So as you can see, with developpement of technology, many diseases are cured now, and helped in increasing the lives of the people.
  • Second, it helped in making life more easier than before.
  • Because of the advancement of the technology, and the new inventions that were made in the last 10 decades, it helped people enourmously in their lives.
  • For instance, people used to cook on woods, and wait for long time to prepare for meals.
  • And now, there are lot of easy meals that you can prepare for having a good meal, within a few minutes only, like cooking hot pizza easily with materials provided, it made it tast so good.
  • Also I remember when people used to go harvesting their crops, it was very hard process especially when it's a big area, and it would demand a lot of workers and time as well.
  • But, now with the availability of different machines that were invented to make the process easy and effecient, and it helped in increasing the productivity of the crops.
  • As you can see, the developement of technology definitely helped in making life more easier and comfortable than before.
  • In sum, there are many things has changed in the past 10 decades, and defintely the remarcable one is technology.
  • It didn't help only by making life of people easy, but it did also increased their life and reduced death's rate.

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    • With the increase of the human poplutation all over the world, there are many improvement happend in life, and many events occured in the last 10 decades.
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    • In my view, I believe the most important event that happened in this time is the developement of technology and its integration in our lives for two reasons.
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    • For example, before 100 years ago, there were a lot of diseases spread all over the world, it caused an enourmous destruction to the population.
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    • And people now can even live with these type of diseases without effecting their bodies, by disabelling their functions in the cells, and stop them from reproduction and infecting other areas.
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    • So as you can see, with developpement of technology, many diseases are cured now, and helped in increasing the lives of the people.
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    • Because of the advancement of the technology, and the new inventions that were made in the last 10 decades, it helped people enourmously in their lives.
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    • And now, there are lot of easy meals that you can prepare for having a good meal, within a few minutes only, like cooking hot pizza easily with materials provided, it made it tast so good.
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    • Also I remember when people used to go harvesting their crops, it was very hard process especially when it's a big area, and it would demand a lot of workers and time as well.
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    • But, now with the availability of different machines that were invented to make the process easy and effecient, and it helped in increasing the productivity of the crops.
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    • As you can see, the developement of technology definitely helped in making life more easier and comfortable than before.
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    • In sum, there are many things has changed in the past 10 decades, and defintely the remarcable one is technology.
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    • It didn't help only by making life of people easy, but it did also increased their life and reduced death's rate.
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