Pataisymai

Text from pitehu - English

  • Please help me check a little passage about Mark Zuckerburg

    • Mark Zuckerberg is the co-founder of the social networking website Facebook who has a personal wealth of estimated $35.1 billion.
    • Had been a prodigy since a very early age, he enjoyed developing computer programs such as “ZuckNet“, which was considered a “primitive version of Instant Messenger”.
    • Besides, he excelled in science and classical studies in Phillips Exeter Academy, one of the best high schools in the U.S and later went to Harvard where he achieved perfect scores and rewards.
    • The next step that Mark would make, it seems to me, is to continue his study at Harvard, a top college, finding a well-paid job or pursuing higher education after graduation .
    • However, to many people’s surprise, he dropped out of Harvard and began working on the Facebook Project which is full of uncertainties.
    • During Mark’s arduous journey to make the world open, as he stated in 2010, a giant divergence emerged between him and some of his friends, which led to series of serious quarrels and even involved Mark in an accusation.
    • Under great pressure, he persisted and stuck to the idea of creating an open information flow for people and eventually made himself to be one of the richest men in the world.
    • Moreover, he is not the man who worships the fortune like a miser, but rather, he is benevolent and not stinted with money.
    • In total, he has devoted more than $1 billion to charity.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

  • Title
  • Sentence 1
  • Sentence 2
    • Had been a prodigy since a very early age, he enjoyed developing computer programs such as “ZuckNet“, which was considered a “primitive version of Instant Messenger”.
      Balsuok dabar!
    • Hade has been a prodigy since a very early age, heand enjoyed developing computer programs such as “ZuckNet“, which was considered to be a “primitive version of Instant Messenger”.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 2
  • Sentence 3
    • Besides, he excelled in science and classical studies in Phillips Exeter Academy, one of the best high schools in the U.S and later went to Harvard where he achieved perfect scores and rewards.
      Balsuok dabar!
    • Besides this, he excelled in science and classical studies inat Phillips Exeter Academy, one of the best high schools in the U.S, and later he went to Harvard where he achieved perfect scores and was offered many rewards.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • The next step that Mark would make, it seems to me, is to continue his study at Harvard, a top college, finding a well-paid job or pursuing higher education after graduation .
      Balsuok dabar!
    • The next step that Mark would make, it seems to me, iswould be to continue his study at Harvard, a top college, and finding a well-paid job, or pursuinge higher education after graduation .
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • During Mark’s arduous journey to make the world open, as he stated in 2010, a giant divergence emerged between him and some of his friends, which led to series of serious quarrels and even involved Mark in an accusation.
      Balsuok dabar!
    • During Mark’s arduous journey to make the world open, as he stated in 2010, a giant divergence emerged between him and some of his friends, which led to series of serious quarrels and even involved Markresulted in an accusation against Mark.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6
  • Sentence 7
    • Under great pressure, he persisted and stuck to the idea of creating an open information flow for people and eventually made himself to be one of the richest men in the world.
      Balsuok dabar!
    • UnderEven under such great pressure, he persisted and stuck to the idea of creating an open information flow for people, and eventually made himself to bbecame one of the richest men in the world.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9