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    • Electroni components : Difficulty of recycle and pollution

    • The increase of the electronic equipment which contain microelectronics components generate a multiplication of electronic wastes.
    • With a lifespan of more and more short the electronic objects are leading to around tens tons of wastes over the world every years.
    • This mountain of wastes could increase about 30% from now to 2017 and weight 65.4 million tons per years.
    • The question of these electronics wastes is worrying: on the one hand by their exponential numbers and on the other hand by the difficulty to recycle them.
  • They actually have important ecological imprint because of quantities of resources in water, metals and energy for their conception, fabrication, transport, use and recycle of electronic components.
    • They contains dangerous elements or metals for the environment.

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    • The increase of the electronic equipment which contain microelectronics components generate a multiplication of electronic wastes.
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    • The increase of the electronic equipment which contain microelectronics components that generate a multiplication of electronic wastes.
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    • The increase of the electronic equipment which contains microelectronics components generate a multiplication of electronic wastes.
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    • The increase of the electronic equipment which containing microelectronics' components generate a multiplicmultiplies the generation of electronic wastes.
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    • With a lifespan of more and more short the electronic objects are leading to around tens tons of wastes over the world every years.
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    • With a lifespan of more and morethat gets shorter, the electronic objects are leading to around tens tons of wastes over the world every years.
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    • With aA decreasing lifespan of more and more short the electronic objects are leading to aroundelectronic devices results in a worldwide accumulation of tens of tons of wastes over the world every per years.
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    • This mountain of wastes could increase about 30% from now to 2017 and weight 65.4 million tons per years.
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    • This mountain of wastes could increase about 30% from now to 2017 and increase by a weight of 65.4 million tons per years.
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    • This mountain of wastes could increase about 30% from now tot a yearly rate of 15 % between 20175 and weight2017 which translates into 65.4 million tons per years.
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    • The question of these electronics wastes is worrying: on the one hand by their exponential numbers and on the other hand by the difficulty to recycle them.
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    • The question of theseissue of electronics wastes is worrying: on the one hand by their exponential numbers and on the other hand by thea source of concern due to both its exponential growth and increasing difficulty to recycle ithem.
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    • They actually have important ecological imprint because of quantities of resources in water, metals and energy for their conception, fabrication, transport, use and recycle of electronic components.
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    • They contains dangerous elements or metals for the environment.
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    • They contains dangerous elements or metals for theIn addition, it is well known that some microelectronic components contain chemical compounds and heavy metals that are a clear environmental hazard.
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