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One Of MY Best Friends

• One of my best friends named Phoenix was my university classmate, also lived in the same domitory.

• Except us speaking Cantonese, other roomates speak Mandarin, so we have been friends soon, and being pen and ink in our university time.

• I really admire her because she has a red personalities.She was the leader of braskball team of our college, leading her team to win the second place in our university braskball match,which was the best place of our college since 2003.She is hard-working too.When she set her mind to something, she would persist.Taking an example of IELTS,she has decided to go abroad for further studying in Astrulia, she repeared for the exam by herself since she was senior.Thought without approvment of her parents, she insisted to do it.She has ten times exam in 2 years and a half,and eventully being successful in last mouth.

• Our teacher said no student she known likes her to do such hard for her dream.

• She is going abroad this mouth,best wishes for her.