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    • the american dream

  • Please correct my text.
  • Thank you :) The role of celebrities is to keep the American Dream alive.
  • Discuss -For the great majority of people, they hope always the American Dream.
    • This is the social success in America even if there is an important rate of poverty.
    • How and why could celebrity keep the American Dream alive ?
    • Firstly, we must point out that in America there is a gap between rich and poor.
  • A lot of immigrant come to America in order to improve their living conditions.
  • They believe at the America Dream.
    • Why many people believe always at the America Dream ?
  • This is thanks to famous people.
    • Indeed, there are celebtity who have succeeded.
    • These are showing their social success via the media like Internet (Facebook, etc...) , or TV show.
    • They tell their way before their success.
  • Thus, many people in America or immigrant think that a similar story could them happened.
    • It should be remembered that this is a Dream.
    • And it's scarce like situation.
    • There is also a seamy side.
    • In addition, many people, who really want this, can lose happiness because this American Dream is just an illusion.
    • And they have to do facing many life problems.
    • To conclude, the America Dream for many people is just a dream and not a reality.
    • But the success of some people can give a few of hope, and this may people help in order to live.
  • In my opinion, the America Dream is difficult to reach it.
    • Time will tell whether there will be other people who suceed with nothing. 239 words

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