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Text from Dmytro-Sytro - English

  • Who wants to be rich?

    • Today world lives with an idea that money makes people happy and that everybody must try to reach success and earn a lot.
    • I don’t want to persuade anybody that the beauty of soul is better than conditions you live in, but I think the very idea the more money you have the more possibilities you get is wrong.
    • We have this connection between money and happy life and it is wrong connection. Why?
  • Because people have much less needs that wishes, and wishes is a sphere of life which is formed by this commodity-money system we live in.
  • We are taught to buy things that we don’t really need but which are considered to be “cool”, “important”, “normal” etc. The more we want to buy the more money we want to earn.
  • But in this wish we think only about ourselves (or our family – it’s the same) but we don’t thing globally – about our country, planet, etc. The Earth doesn’t need so many managers but needs scientists, ecologies etc. And when we want to be rich our wishes are very egoistic because who is rich is important, who is poor is a person out of concern.
  • My point is it is not bad to be rich or to want to be rich.
  • But we should revaluate our wishes and think about others.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • I don’t want to persuade anybody that the beauty of soul is better than conditions you live in, but I think the very idea the more money you have the more possibilities you get is wrong.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • I don’t want to persuade anybody that the beauty of soul is better than conditions you live in, but I think the very idea that the more money you have, then the more possibilities you get is wrong.
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    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2
  • Frazo 3
  • Frazo 4
    • Because people have much less needs that wishes, and wishes is a sphere of life which is formed by this commodity-money system we live in.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4
  • Frazo 5
    • We are taught to buy things that we don’t really need but which are considered to be “cool”, “important”, “normal” etc. The more we want to buy the more money we want to earn.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 5ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 5
  • Frazo 6
    • But in this wish we think only about ourselves (or our family – it’s the same) but we don’t thing globally – about our country, planet, etc. The Earth doesn’t need so many managers but needs scientists, ecologies etc. And when we want to be rich our wishes are very egoistic because who is rich is important, who is poor is a person out of concern.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 6
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  • Frazo 8