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  • Entering the Hall of Whispers- Part One

  • Once again I found myself trying to improve my English writing skill by using Robert E. Howard’s work.
  • I just want to make clear that the following is just an exercise in which I took Howard’s tales and narrated them from my perspective, inventing very little .
  • I would really love to receive any feedback you can give me, guys  thanks for reading my exercise!
  • eyes and the half pale colour of her skin.
  • Conan got up now reinvigorated...
  • Entering the Hall of Whispers- Part One Heimdul suddenly found himself into a strange place.
  • He remembered a soft sound, something cold entering his stomach and nothing more.
  • No memories of Conan and of his last fight, for dying make people confused and puzzled perhaps more than coming to life.
  • Though he had no consciousness of being dead.
  • The area was boundless.
  • A strange mist impregnated everything, covering Heimdul with a transparent cloak.
  • A gentle wind began to rise in the quietness of the mist.
  • A hand made of fume, graceful and delicate suddenly materialized itself from the mist and began to caress the red-haired warrior.
  • He didn’t find it strange nor was he suspicious and abandoning himself to that lovely touch, he remembered of a long time before.
  • And then he became part of a vivid vision: his wife Vania was holding him to her breast with the whole warm of his body.
  • She had disappeared from his life, taken away, dragged into the oblivion by a monstrous terror which had no name.
  • No other woman could ever take her place and Heimdul had his heart shrivelled ever since.
  • All of a sudden the hand made of mist stopped cuddling him and the vision disappeared.
  • Heimdul felt cold again.
  • Before dissolving itself in that sea of undefined mist, the hand pointed an entrance nearby that was now lighted in the general mist.
  • Heimdul moved toward the entrance, looking troubled and deeply missing the warm of that vision he had, that dream of which he would have liked not to wake up from.
  • A huge wooden gate blocked the passage: something like a mysterious writing of an ancient language was on the top of it.
  • “Gibberish!” Exclaimed Heimdul concerning himself about the strange writing.
  • Pushing the massive gate in front of him with all the strength of his arms, he stepped into a large hall, a bare and desert place.
  • A stink of death impregnated the air.
  • In the distance Heimdul saw a white, pale figure arrogantly seating upon a throne made of oaken wood at the top of a small flight of stairs.
  • The figure seemed awaken and yet motionless, with deep grey eyes of the same colour of a northern landscape like as if he carried the soul of the north in himself.
  • The ferocious cold biting of the winter was portrayed in his expression.
  • His face, gaunt, clearly contorted, discoloured nearly as white as milk was travelled by a profound line of ice and putrid human flesh altogether mixed as if a dreadful plague coming directly from Ymir’s hell had caught him.
  • His appearance showed nothing more than a dusty carcass eternally doomed, but his halo on the other hand suggested that he was an echo of a past glory, now grown tired of his throne like the echo that gets more and more feeble as it goes on, loosing itself in the mountains.
  • He had a sword very close to his right hand, in a black scabbard that was posed on a special construction made purposefully in order to hold the ancient sword, which seemed to have fallen into misery the same exact way of its owner.
  • The whole body of the Skeleton figure was covered with an armour made of steel which nonetheless showed several bones.
  • Upon his troubled head an ice crown took place: slowly melting the ice was descending on what remained of his hair, making him look once again fallen and doomed to a ultimate destruction through a humiliating process like when the snow melts in the coming of summer.
  • Blind and paradoxically still able to see through his eyes , that skeleton king seemed to have lost even the smallest form of humanity.
  • Gone as well as probably the heart warming feeling people call love.
  • No, there was no room left in that undefined doomed creature, fully travelled by furrows of ice as if he was an entity of a mysterious nature, a revolting fallen emperor sitting upon an unhandy throne.

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