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  • Cover Letter

  • Hi Guys, I'm preparing my cover letter for possible future job positions.. can you correct it?
  • Thank you so much!!!
    • Here it is: Dear ………….: I Am a Versatile and Committed Candidate interested in applying to your Graduated Programme.
  • I learned of this position through your institutional website.
  • I recently received my M.Sc “Cum Laude” in Business Management at the University XXX.
  • I was primarily educated on Business Strategy and Entrepreneurship studies mainly focused on Strategic Management and Market Development.
    • Furthermore, thanks to my final work achieved in Corporate Social Responsibility, I had the possibility to deep dive the theories of CSR and the business model behind them giving me the opportunity to master your TBL approach.
    • For this reasons it would be such an honour for me to work in your pioneer Company, which had incorporated this social and sustainable model in its own core business.
    • In addition, I’ve been recently selected to participate to the “Talent University Programme” which is a partnership project promoted by XXX to develop, over the next three months, the capabilities of the best ten graduates of my University.
    • Moreover, I had some work-related experience during the past three years of studies such an internship position in a marketing company and a project management traineeship.
    • I trust this opportunity will strongly position my career focus on Business Analyst, Sales Representative and Business Development and thus allowing me to quickly move along my learning curve in a fast-path and top work environment.
    • I believe I would be able to give my contribution developing my professional and technical skills alongside my peers and my experienced colleagues with the ultimate goal of creating value through pragmatic, innovative and viable strategic guidelines.
    • My Academic background coupled with collaborative and team-leading approach, strong determination and communication skills that I have primarily developed through frequent working group participations will also be extremely valuable to me in an international and challenging environment of (company name).
  • They will help me thrive and achieve important and challenging objectives to assure a personal development together with a return value to your organization and the clients we will serve.
  • Therefore I am looking for an opportunity to discover a foreign business culture while enhancing further my English knowledge and getting some practical experience, fitting to my studies.
  • I am confident that this Graduate Programme would provide me the ideal opportunity to assist your organization and to expand my skills.
  • I am even sure that my high motivations and learning ability will help me through this exciting experience, and these coupled with my other skills would be a valuable asset for your organization.
    • My resume, which provides all the information about my academic and professional background along something more about myself, is enclosed in the following.
  • I would be pleased to provide you with any further information.
  • Thank you for your consideration and I am looking forward to hearing from you.
  • Sincerely, XXX

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    • Furthermore, thanks to my final work achieved in Corporate Social Responsibility, I had the possibility to deep dive the theories of CSR and the business model behind them giving me the opportunity to master your TBL approach.
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    • Furthermore, thanks to my final work achieved in Corporate Social Responsibility, I had the possibility to deep divelve deeply into the theories of CSR and the business model behind them giving me the opportunity to master your TBL approach.
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    • For this reasons it would be such an honour for me to work in your pioneer Company, which had incorporated this social and sustainable model in its own core business.
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    • For thisese reasons it would be such an honour for me to work in your pioneer Company, which had incorporated this social and sustainable model in its own core business.
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    • For thisese reasons itI would be such an honour for mehonoured to work in your pioneer Ccompany, which hads incorporated this social and sustainable model in its own core business core.
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    • In addition, I’ve been recently selected to participate to the “Talent University Programme” which is a partnership project promoted by XXX to develop, over the next three months, the capabilities of the best ten graduates of my University.
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    • In addition to my other achievements, I’ve been recently been selected to participate toin the “Talent University Programme” which is a partnership project promoted by XXX to develop, over the next three months, the capabilities of the besttop ten graduates of my University. over the next three months
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    • Moreover, I had some work-related experience during the past three years of studies such an internship position in a marketing company and a project management traineeship.
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    • Moreover, I have had some work-related experience during the past three years of studiesy such as an internship position in a marketing company and a project management traineeship.
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    • I trust this opportunity will strongly position my career focus on Business Analyst, Sales Representative and Business Development and thus allowing me to quickly move along my learning curve in a fast-path and top work environment.
      Vote agora!
    • I trust this opportunity will strongly position my career focus on Business Analyst, Sales Representative and Business Development and thus allowing me to quickly move along my learning curve in a fast-path and topced work environment.
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      Vote agora!
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    • I believe I would be able to give my contribution developing my professional and technical skills alongside my peers and my experienced colleagues with the ultimate goal of creating value through pragmatic, innovative and viable strategic guidelines.
      Vote agora!
    • I believe I would be able to give my contributione to the company while developing my professional and technical skills alongside my peers and my experienced colleagues with the ultimate goal of creating value through pragmatic, innovative and viable strategic guidelines.
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      Vote agora!
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    • My Academic background coupled with collaborative and team-leading approach, strong determination and communication skills that I have primarily developed through frequent working group participations will also be extremely valuable to me in an international and challenging environment of (company name).
      Vote agora!
    • My Aacademic background coupled with my collaborative and team-leading approach, strong determination and communication skills that I have primarily developed through frequent working group participteamwork situations will also be extremely valuable to me in an international and challenging environment of (your company name).
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    • They will help me thrive and achieve important and challenging objectives to assure a personal development together with a return value to your organization and the clients we will serve.
      Vote agora!
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    • Therefore I am looking for an opportunity to discover a foreign business culture while enhancing further my English knowledge and getting some practical experience, fitting to my studies.
      Vote agora!
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    • I am even sure that my high motivations and learning ability will help me through this exciting experience, and these coupled with my other skills would be a valuable asset for your organization.
      Vote agora!
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    • My resume, which provides all the information about my academic and professional background along something more about myself, is enclosed in the following.
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    • My resume, which provides all the information about more detailed account of my academic and professional background along something more about myself, is enclosed in the following.
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