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  • Just a few words about a game

    • Recently I played in awesome computer game name Assassins Creed.
    • This game is about a war beetwen the Templars and the Assassins and trought the machine called the Animus a main hero Desmond Miles can back became one of his ancestors.
    • In first part of this game he becames the Altair an assassin who is just doing commends from his master Al-Mualim.
    • Both sides try to find a piece of Eden an apple which is indeed remarkable, it has a knowledge about future and another mistical things.
    • Oh, i forgot to say that the action is in 12th century.
    • Thought the game Altair or rather Desmond in Altair's skin killed a lot of enemy troops in many spectacular ways.
    • With hiding blades (which are complately marvelous) he can kill everyone, besides the blades he has also cool sword, throwing knives and awesome armor.
    • At the end of the game unfortunally he has to kill his own master becouse he thinhs that the apple possessed him. It's shame.
    • That is just a short story about this game, if someone played on it know that a story is very expanded, and with clean conscience i can recommened it to all of you.
    • I hope that I wasn't made a lot of mistakes.

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    • This game is about a war beetwen the Templars and the Assassins and trought the machine called the Animus a main hero Desmond Miles can back became one of his ancestors.
      투표하세요!
    • This game is about a war beetween the Templars and the Assassins, and throughout the game the machine called the Animus there is a main hero named Desmond Miles canwho came back became one of his ancestors.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2
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    • In first part of this game he becames the Altair an assassin who is just doing commends from his master Al-Mualim.
      투표하세요!
    • In the first part of this game he becames the Altair, an assassin who is just doing commeands from his master, Al-Mualim.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3
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    • Both sides try to find a piece of Eden an apple which is indeed remarkable, it has a knowledge about future and another mistical things.
      투표하세요!
    • Both sides try to find a pPieces of Eden an, apples which is indeed remarkable, it has a knowledge about the future and another miystical things.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
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    • Thought the game Altair or rather Desmond in Altair's skin killed a lot of enemy troops in many spectacular ways.
      투표하세요!
    • Throughout the game Altair, or rather Desmond in Altair's skin, killed a lot of enemy troops in many spectacular ways.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
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    • With hiding blades (which are complately marvelous) he can kill everyone, besides the blades he has also cool sword, throwing knives and awesome armor.
      투표하세요!
    • With hiding blades (which are complaetely marvelous), he can kill everyone, b. Besides the blades he has, he also has a cool sword, throwing knives and awesome armor.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7
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    • At the end of the game unfortunally he has to kill his own master becouse he thinhs that the apple possessed him. It's shame.
      투표하세요!
    • At the end of the game, unfortunaltely he has to kill his own master becoause he thinhks that the apple possessed him. I—it's a shame.
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    • That is just a short story about this game, if someone played on it know that a story is very expanded, and with clean conscience i can recommened it to all of you.
      투표하세요!
    • That is just a short story about this game, i. If someone played on itit they would know that a story like this is very expandedsive, and with clean conscifidence iI can recommened it to all of you.
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