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  • A Veil Left in a Frozen Plain

  • Introduction.
  • Once again I found myself reading Robert E.
    • Howard’s The Frost Giant’s Daughter, which is probably the Sword and Sorcery tale (that’s actually the way this particular genre is called) I like the most.
  • I actually can’t stop listening to the dramatized audiobook version available on youtube!
  • Now, just for practicing and for fun also, I’ll do my best trying to describe the opening scene of that tale, adding some details which are not described by Howard but that I’ve been visualizing many times during my reading.
    • Obviously I won’t be as brilliant as Bob Howard has been, but I am sure you’ll forgive me because of that.
    • One more thing: again, I want to point out very clear that I am not trying to steal anyone’s tale or characters, this is just an exercise which I’ve done basing myself on a work by Robert E. Howard. Part one.
    • There is a brooding silence all around the snow field, a frosty, silvery landscape once charming and now darkened with a gloomy atmosphere, also filled with mutilated red-haired corpses everywhere.
    • In that illimitable, white plain, two figures stand upright; both are mighty warriors built powerfully as fierce gladiators, forged in the slaughter of battle.
    • Both many times escaped at the deathly embrace of the Reaper, being themselves skilled slayers.
  • The black-haired one is shieldless and he holds a huge aquilonian broadsword: his name his Conan, a barbarian who has come from a mythical far away northern country, called Cimmeria.
    • He stands with his feet planted in the snow like an iron statue, ignoring the growing sick weariness due to the fighting.
    • Beardless, inscrutable in his black cloak and cold as snow itself, he glares with his wolfish blue eyes at the other figure right in front of him, Heimdulof the red hair.
    • Heimdul is also shieldless, yet armoured with a mailed corselet and holds in his hands a sharpened long axe.
    • His locks of beard are red just like his hair, red as an early and naked dawn running on the snows.
    • Shaking his head like a lion might shake his mane, with a roar Heimdul slowly starts speaking to Conan....

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  • Titel
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    • Howard’s The Frost Giant’s Daughter, which is probably the Sword and Sorcery tale (that’s actually the way this particular genre is called) I like the most.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Howard’s 'The Frost Giant’s Daughter', which is probably the 'Sword and Sorcery' tale (that’s actually the way this particular genre is callede particular name of this sub-genre) I like the most.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 3Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 3
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  • Satz 5
    • Now, just for practicing and for fun also, I’ll do my best trying to describe the opening scene of that tale, adding some details which are not described by Howard but that I’ve been visualizing many times during my reading.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 5Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 5
  • Satz 6
  • Satz 7
    • One more thing: again, I want to point out very clear that I am not trying to steal anyone’s tale or characters, this is just an exercise which I’ve done basing myself on a work by Robert E. Howard. Part one.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Once more thing: again, I want to point out very clear, I want to emphasise that I am not trying to steal anyone else's tale or characters,; this is justsimply an exercise which I’ve done basing myself on a workmyself, based on part I of a tale by Robert E. Howard. Part one.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 7Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 7
  • Satz 8
    • There is a brooding silence all around the snow field, a frosty, silvery landscape once charming and now darkened with a gloomy atmosphere, also filled with mutilated red-haired corpses everywhere.
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    • There is a brooding silence allthat skims softly acroundss the snow field,; a frosty, silvery landscape once charming and now darkened with a grey and gloomy atmosphere, also filled with mutilated red-haired corpses scattered everywhere.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 8Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 8
  • Satz 9
    • In that illimitable, white plain, two figures stand upright; both are mighty warriors built powerfully as fierce gladiators, forged in the slaughter of battle.
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    • In that illimitable, white plain, two figures stand upright; both are mighty warriors, built as powerfully and as fierce as gladiators, forged in the slaughter of battle.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 9Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 9
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    • The black-haired one is shieldless and he holds a huge aquilonian broadsword: his name his Conan, a barbarian who has come from a mythical far away northern country, called Cimmeria.
      Jetzt abstimmen!
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 11Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 11
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    • Beardless, inscrutable in his black cloak and cold as snow itself, he glares with his wolfish blue eyes at the other figure right in front of him, Heimdulof the red hair.
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    • Beardless, inscrutable in his black cloak and as cold as the snow itself, he glares with his wolfish blue eyes at the other figure right in front of him, Heimdulof the red hair.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 13Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 13
  • Satz 14
    • Heimdul is also shieldless, yet armoured with a mailed corselet and holds in his hands a sharpened long axe.
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    • Heimdul is also shieldless, yet armoured with a mailed corselet and, holdsing firmly in his hands a sharpened long axe that slices the air, splintering the silence all at once.
    • Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 14Füge eine neue Korrektur hinzu! - Satz 14
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