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  • I don’t usually write about news or what’s currently happening in the world, but a couple of days ago I heard of this whole controversy about the new American Coca-Cola commercial that was released during the last Superbowl, and I wanted to give my opinion about it because it made me think a lot.
    • In this commercial (which is supposed to show what the US are really like and what American people do in every day’s life), we can see lots of people of many origins (North American, of course, but people from South America, Asia, Arabic countries, Africa or even Europe) living a normal day in the USA, while the song “America The Beautiful” is being sang in many languages (representing the diversity of people living in the country).
  • I understand the opinion of whoever complains about this ad and the fact that the people in it are not what they call “real Americans”, but I think they should remember that, if we take a look back at the country’s history, the “real Americans” apparently have never existed.
  • Not so long ago, what is today the United States of America still belonged to different people who have by now almost all disappeared.
  • The Americans as we know them now are descended from the Europeans who colonised the continent.
  • So, in my opinion, the “real American” is a myth.
  • The USA is so big, so diverse, and has received so many influences from all over the world that the “real Americans” as people like to picture them don’t exist.
    • It’s a mix of many people arrived from different parts of the world who lived side by side for many centuries and built up the country together.
  • The USA, as Switzerland, is a country full of contrasts, with people from many different origins, who have different cultures and different languages, and that’s what makes the country beautiful, because they’re all building it together.
    • In my opinion, this diversity is strength rather than a weakness.
  • The exact same thing happens in my country.
    • Switzerland is split between four parts, with four languages and four cultures that are similar sometimes and sometimes completely opposed.
    • There also are many foreigners there (23% of the population, more than 40% in some cities), and logically some people complain about it.
    • I understand their fear that people from other countries will come and change the “essence” of our little Switzerland.
    • However, in my opinion, we have to accept them and work together with them to make our country stronger.
  • I really liked that commercial.
    • I don’t know much about the USA but, from what I’ve seen and what I’ve been told, it seems to correspond to what life there looks like, though, unfortunately, many people would like it to change.
  • I think that it’s not possible anymore to “protect” a country against this cultural mix that is currently spreading all around the world.
    • It’s globalization, traveling is easy, some countries are in a better situation than others and that’s why they attract people who prefer to leave there.
  • And I think that this is great.
    • I love the fact that so many people come to live in Switzerland, this means the country is a nice place to live in, and we should feel lucky to live somewhere people want to go.
  • Watching this commercial and seeing that such a big company as Coca-Cola values this social diversity made me happy.
  • I keep hope; hope that one day we’ll all be kind and tolerant toward each other, and that discrimination and rejection won’t be a thing anymore.
  • I’m sure that we can do it, I believe in the human being and in the fact that one day we’ll be strong enough as people, inside of ourselves, not to need frontiers anymore.
  • I’m happy that Coca-Cola dared do that.
  • It gave rise to a debate, but this makes people think about who they are and discuss their points of view, and this, in my opinion, is the first step toward tolerance.
  • I think that we should remember more often that, despite the fact that we belong to different countries, we all belong to the same world, and that God (or whoever/ whatever created us) made us all equal, all brothers…

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • I don’t usually write about news or what’s currently happening in the world, but a couple of days ago I heard of this whole controversy about the new American Coca-Cola commercial that was released during the last Superbowl, and I wanted to give my opinion about it because it made me think a lot.
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    • In this commercial (which is supposed to show what the US are really like and what American people do in every day’s life), we can see lots of people of many origins (North American, of course, but people from South America, Asia, Arabic countries, Africa or even Europe) living a normal day in the USA, while the song “America The Beautiful” is being sang in many languages (representing the diversity of people living in the country).
      Äänestä nyt!
    • In this commercial (which is supposed to show whathow the US are really like and what American people do in every day’s life), we can see lots of people of many origins (North American, of course, but people from South America, Asia, Arabic countries, Africa or even Europe) living a normal day in the USA, while the song “America The Beautiful” is being sang in many languages (representing the diversity of people living in the country).
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    • I understand the opinion of whoever complains about this ad and the fact that the people in it are not what they call “real Americans”, but I think they should remember that, if we take a look back at the country’s history, the “real Americans” apparently have never existed.
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    • Not so long ago, what is today the United States of America still belonged to different people who have by now almost all disappeared.
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    • The USA is so big, so diverse, and has received so many influences from all over the world that the “real Americans” as people like to picture them don’t exist.
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    • It’s a mix of many people arrived from different parts of the world who lived side by side for many centuries and built up the country together.
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    • It’s a mix of many people who arrived from different parts of the world, who lived side by side for many centuries and built up the country together.
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    • The USA, as Switzerland, is a country full of contrasts, with people from many different origins, who have different cultures and different languages, and that’s what makes the country beautiful, because they’re all building it together.
      Äänestä nyt!
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    • Switzerland is split between four parts, with four languages and four cultures that are similar sometimes and sometimes completely opposed.
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    • Switzerland is split betweedivided in four parts, with four languages and four cultures that are similar sometimes and sometimes completely opposed.
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    • There also are many foreigners there (23% of the population, more than 40% in some cities), and logically some people complain about it.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • There also are many foreigners there (23% of the population, more than 40% in some cities), and logically some people complain about it.
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    • I understand their fear that people from other countries will come and change the “essence” of our little Switzerland.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • I understand their fear thatof people from other countries willho could come and change the “essence” of our little Switzerland.
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    • I don’t know much about the USA but, from what I’ve seen and what I’ve been told, it seems to correspond to what life there looks like, though, unfortunately, many people would like it to change.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • I don’t know much about the USA but, from what I’ve seen and what I’ve been told, it seems to correspond to what life there looks likethe way life looks there , though, unfortunately, many people would like it to change.
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    • I think that it’s not possible anymore to “protect” a country against this cultural mix that is currently spreading all around the world.
      Äänestä nyt!
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    • It’s globalization, traveling is easy, some countries are in a better situation than others and that’s why they attract people who prefer to leave there.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • It’s globalization, travelling is easy, some countries are in a better situation than others and that’s why they attractmake people who prefer to leaveant to go there.
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    • I love the fact that so many people come to live in Switzerland, this means the country is a nice place to live in, and we should feel lucky to live somewhere people want to go.
      Äänestä nyt!
    • I love the fact that so many people come to live in Switzerland, this means the country is a nice place to live in, and we should feel lucky to live someplace where people want to gocome.
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    • Watching this commercial and seeing that such a big company as Coca-Cola values this social diversity made me happy.
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    • I keep hope; hope that one day we’ll all be kind and tolerant toward each other, and that discrimination and rejection won’t be a thing anymore.
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    • I’m sure that we can do it, I believe in the human being and in the fact that one day we’ll be strong enough as people, inside of ourselves, not to need frontiers anymore.
      Äänestä nyt!
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    • It gave rise to a debate, but this makes people think about who they are and discuss their points of view, and this, in my opinion, is the first step toward tolerance.
      Äänestä nyt!
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    • I think that we should remember more often that, despite the fact that we belong to different countries, we all belong to the same world, and that God (or whoever/ whatever created us) made us all equal, all brothers…
      Äänestä nyt!
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