Corrections

HELP TO CORRECT NOW!Parandatud

Text from theBird - English

  • Charts

    • The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 95 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
    • Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
    • (please, have a look to the chat first).
  • The Charts : http://ielts.studyhorror.com/resources/upImages/writings/2011/08/06/IELTS-Writing-Task-1-Japanese-Tourism-And-Australian-Share-Of-The-Japanese-Tourist-Market_1.jpg . The answer: .
    • The charts demonstrate the number of Japanese travelled to foreign countries as tourists from 1985 to 1959, and the proportion of them who travelled particularly to Australia in same decade.
    • The bar graph shows that the number of Japanese travelled abroad was 5 million in 1985, and it increased dramatically to reach 15 million people in 95 as three times as more travellers.
    • Although it was a noticeable fluctuation from 1991 to 1993 but it continued to increase in 1994.
    • The line graph illustrates the Australia’s shares of Japan’s tourist market also in these ten years .
    • The percentage of Japanese visitors was 2 in 1985 and it increased by 5% in 1989.
    • However, it dropped slightly to 4.2% in 1990 an it recovered to reach the peak of around 6.1% in 1994.
    • In conclusion, there is a correlation between two graphs that the Australia’s share of Japan’s tourist market increased as long as the number of Japanese was travelling abroad grown.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

  • Title
  • Sentence 1
    • The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 95 and Australia’s share of the Japanese tourist market.
      Vote now!
    • The charts below show the number of Japanese touristcitizens travelling abroad between 1985 and 1995 ands well as Australia’s share of the Japanese tourisat market.
      JesVasJesVas profile picture Kommentaarid
      Vote now!
    • The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and 95, and also shows Australia’s share of the Japanese touristhat market.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentaarid 1
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 1
  • Sentence 2
  • Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • The Charts : http://ielts.studyhorror.com/resources/upImages/writings/2011/08/06/IELTS-Writing-Task-1-Japanese-Tourism-And-Australian-Share-Of-The-Japanese-Tourist-Market_1.jpg . The answer: .
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
    • The charts demonstrate the number of Japanese travelled to foreign countries as tourists from 1985 to 1959, and the proportion of them who travelled particularly to Australia in same decade.
      Vote now!
    • The charts demonstrate the number of Japanese citizens travelleding to foreign countries as tourists frombetween the year 1985 toand 19959, and the proportion of them whothat travelled particularly to Australia in samethat decade.
      JesVasJesVas profile picture Kommentaarid
      Vote now!
    • The charts demonstrate the number of Japanese citizens travelleding to foreign countries as tourists from 1985 to 1959, and95. The charts also demonstrate the proportion of themourists who travelled particularly to Australia in sameduring that decade.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentaarid 1
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • The bar graph shows that the number of Japanese travelled abroad was 5 million in 1985, and it increased dramatically to reach 15 million people in 95 as three times as more travellers.
      Vote now!
    • The bar graph shows that the number of Japanese citizens that travelled abroad was 5 million in 1985, and it increased dramatically to reach 15 million people in 95 as three times as more travellersincreased by a three fold. Going from five 5 million in 1985 to as much as 15 million in 1995.
      JesVasJesVas profile picture Kommentaarid
      0% GOOD (1 votes)
    • The bar graph shows that the number of Japanese citizens who travelled abroad was 5 million in 1985, and it increased dramatically to reach 15 million people in 95 as three times as more travellers. The number of travellers dramatically increased, tripling to 15 million people by 1995.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentaarid
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 6
  • Sentence 7
    • Although it was a noticeable fluctuation from 1991 to 1993 but it continued to increase in 1994.
      Vote now!
    • Although ithere was a noticeable fluctuation fromin the years 1991 to 1993 but it continued to increase, the increase continued in 1994.
      JesVasJesVas profile picture Kommentaarid
      Vote now!
    • Although ithere was a noticeable fluctuation from 1991 to 1993 but it, there continued toan increase ind amount of Japanese tourists who travelled to Australia by 1994.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentaarid
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9
  • Sentence 10
  • Sentence 11
    • In conclusion, there is a correlation between two graphs that the Australia’s share of Japan’s tourist market increased as long as the number of Japanese was travelling abroad grown.
      Vote now!
    • In conclusion, there is a correlation between the two graphs that th, where Australia’s share of Japan’s tourist market increased as long as the number of Japanese was travelling abroad grown.
      genzaimugenzaimu profile picture Kommentaarid
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 11