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Essay

• There have always been a number of people considering that rewarding their children with extra pocket money is one of the best ways to keep them studying hard.

• But is it true or are they just not able to see the reverse side of the issue?

• As far as I am concerned, I believe that such a common method can bring young generations a lot of harm.

• First of all, it may reflect on child’s behaviour and train of thought.

• What makes it worse is that, apart from that, it may mislead your children so that they cannot see the veritable purpose of their education.

• They should comprehend that the major aim of theirs is not getting their parents’ money, but being able to gain their own one.

• Therefore, such encouragements hinder your kids’ mind from the true conception of the matter.

• However, there is another point of view.

• They say that, by praising your child, it is easier to keep them under control and get from them what you want to.

• Nevertheless, I cannot agree with that opinion since, to my mind, too much money can only corrupt a green mind and will certainly teach nothing worthy.

• To conclude, I shall point that, according to the arguments above, it is clear: encouraging students by means of extra money is not the best way of educating, and a good parent will always find a better method while bringing his child up.