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  • January 16th

  • Today is Wednesday, January 16th.
    • Today I felt cold all day, when I woke up, I returned the call, 'cause Xiomy said me last night :"call me when you wake up".
    • When she picked up the cell phone, she said me: "good morning dear, today we accomplish another month, kiss", I still feel very very very happy.
    • When I saw her on the bus, she got on the bus, and sat beside me, and we started to talk over us, I gave a letter, but not a normal letter, a scrapbook ball, I did last night, when she saw it, she held me.
    • Later she said me: "your present I'll give you in the afternoon and night".
    • After school, she came at my home and we made muffins, after she gave me a bracelet with her name, my name, and hearts.
    • Now, we go to the hairdressing.
    • I want cut the hair, My hairdresser, has a blond hair, she is beautiful.
    • At night, I want that Xiomy stay with me.
    • This noon in the recess she said me: "you don't must have fear, I feel very good with you, you don't must feel fear, you get a little light that lightens my way" Everybody know that I love her, 'cause in my school separated us.
    • I feel fear for that, I don't know what think or do, I feel alone in my class, although my friends try to animate me, I feel sad.

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    • Today I felt cold all day, when I woke up, I returned the call, 'cause Xiomy said me last night :"call me when you wake up".
      투표하세요!
    • Today I felt cold all day, w. When I woke up, I returned the call, 'cause last night Xiomy saitold me last night :"to call hime when youI wake up".
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2
  • 문장 3
    • When she picked up the cell phone, she said me: "good morning dear, today we accomplish another month, kiss", I still feel very very very happy.
      투표하세요!
    • When she picked up the cell phone, she said me: "gGood morning dear, today we accomplish another month, kiss", I still feel very very very happy.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3
  • 문장 4
    • When I saw her on the bus, she got on the bus, and sat beside me, and we started to talk over us, I gave a letter, but not a normal letter, a scrapbook ball, I did last night, when she saw it, she held me.
      투표하세요!
    • When I saw her onat the bus stop, she got on the bus, and sat beside me, and we started to talk overabout us,. I gave her a letter, but not a normal letter, a scrapbook ball, I didmade last night, w. When she saw it, she helembraced me.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
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  • 문장 6
    • After school, she came at my home and we made muffins, after she gave me a bracelet with her name, my name, and hearts.
      투표하세요!
    • After school, she came ato my home and we made muffins, a. After that she gave me a bracelet with her name, my name, and hearts.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
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  • 문장 10
    • This noon in the recess she said me: "you don't must have fear, I feel very good with you, you don't must feel fear, you get a little light that lightens my way" Everybody know that I love her, 'cause in my school separated us.
      투표하세요!
    • This noon in the recess she said me: "you don't musshould not have fear, I feel very good with you, you don't musshould not feel fearful, you get a little light that lightens my way"¶Everybody knows that I love her, 'cause in my school separated us.
    • This noon in theduring recess she said me: "you don't must haveshould not fear,. I feel very good with you, you don't. You must feelnot fear, you get. You are a little light that lightens my way/"¶Everybody knows that I love her, 'because in my school separated us.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10
  • 문장 11
    • I feel fear for that, I don't know what think or do, I feel alone in my class, although my friends try to animate me, I feel sad.
      투표하세요!
    • I feel fear forabout that, I don't know what to think or to do, I feel alone in my class, although my friends try to animate mecheer me up, I feel sad.
    • I feel fear foram scared of that,. I don't know what think or do,. I feel alone in my class, although my friends try to animate me,cheer me up. I feel sad.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11