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Please comment on my paragraph, In Ha Long, there are many modern hotels with bedrooms are decorated in European, asian style and fully equimented with facilites.

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leedel profile picture leedelNovember 2021

I would say: In Ha Long there are many modern hotels that have bedrooms decorated in European and Asian styles, fully equipped with the necessary facilities.

StewYorkshire profile picture StewYorkshireNovember 2021
In Ha Long there are many modern hotels with bedrooms decorated in European and Asian styles. They are all fully equipped with all the facilites you would expect.
  • Justwondering profile picture JustwonderingNovember 2021
    Agreed

    You asked for comments, so here is some more information.

    BASIC ANALYSIS
    The above responder broke the sentence into two smaller sentences. That made it clearer. If you are learning English, making shorter sentences may also be an easy way for you to make clearer sentences whenever you’re writing.

    I don’t believe ”equipmented” is a word. ”Equipment” is a noun; ”Equip” is the related verb.
    So, you would have to use the verb ”equip” and use past-tense of that to make a past-tense verb. (You can’t make a noun past tense.)


    ADDITIONAL OPTIONS:
    Here are some more options. (The changes are capitalized.)
    In Ha Long, there are many modern hotels with bedrooms WHICH are decorated in European, AND Asian styleS...

    In Ha Long, there are many modern hotels with bedrooms THAT are decorated in European, AND Asian styleS...

    Without the capitalization, those sentences would look like this:
    In Ha Long, there are many modern hotels with bedrooms which are decorated in European, and Asian styles.

    Or

    In Ha Long, there are many modern hotels with bedrooms that are decorated in European, and Asian styles.

    ADVANCED ENGLISH CHANGES-CONTENT
    (If you are in English 1, your teacher probably won’t care about the changes below.)

    One thing that I noticed about the sentence is that I don’t really know what you wanted to say or why you were saying it.

    It’s clear that you are writing a report or an advertisement of some sort, that’s not what I mean.

    What are the facilites that these hotels have? Bathrooms? Workout rooms and conference rooms? Electricity, AC, and heating? Just beds?

    I understand that the sentence is probably part of a larger paragraph, but it still doesn’t sound quite right. I think that’s why the above responder said ”with all the facilites you would expect.”

    Their correction is probably the best change that could be made without more information, but I don’t think an English speaker would write it that way if they were starting from scratch (writing their own sentence).

    They would say something along the lines of ”Unlike hotels serving the locals, these hotels have indoor plumbing.” (If by ”facilities” you meant running water.)

    I guess it’s hard to correct that sentence without knowing more.

    As it is, it implies that the normal hotels in Ha Long are not up to Asian or European standards, but the hotels you are discussing are.

    Basics, it sounds like information that doesn’t have a point and should be left out or drastically rephrased.

    ADVERTISEMENTS
    Comments with no meaning are common in advertisements.
    If this is an ad, there is definitely a tendency in advertising to make vague misleading claims. If that’s the intent, misleading people (obfuscation) in English tends to require a very high level of skill in English. After all, it requires using English in a way that is technically accurate but consistantly misleading to people who have analyzed and played with the language their entire lives.
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