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  • Mini Essay: Should the government support the arts?

  • In my opinion the government should help the artist.
    • As a result of this help is infrastructure will be built which could provide the talented people to have place where they can paint, create sculpture and express themself in creativity.
  • I would like to introduce both points of view and at the same time give reason why is the support important for artists.
  • In the first case when the governments do not provide condition for creativity, people have to create a piece of art that could be selling.
  • Sometimes their works become a superficial popularity, because of epatage and glare, without any meaning for the culture.
  • In the second case with the support the situation is different.
  • Now creative people have place where to work, what to eat and how to introduce their piece of art to society.
  • Therefore their arts become more consistent, better perform and more meaningful.
    • In conclusion, the support of the government is the most important thing for artists, because money becomes less important than expression of their soul.

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    • As a result of this help is infrastructure will be built which could provide the talented people to have place where they can paint, create sculpture and express themself in creativity.
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    • As a result of this help is infrastructure will be built which could provide the talented people to have place where they can paint, create sculpture and express themself in creativityrtists need a good infrastructure to be able to make the most of their talents.
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    • I would like to introduce both points of view and at the same time give reason why is the support important for artists.
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    • In the first case when the governments do not provide condition for creativity, people have to create a piece of art that could be selling.
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    • Sometimes their works become a superficial popularity, because of epatage and glare, without any meaning for the culture.
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    • In conclusion, the support of the government is the most important thing for artists, because money becomes less important than expression of their soul.
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    • In conclusWhen people do not need to worry about the basic needs of life, such as food and accommodation, they are usupport of the government is the most important thing for artists, because money becomes less important than expression of their soulally much more productive. The better an artists work, the more value it has to society. If artists create better work, this should be of greater value to the general public and, therefore, goes someway towards justifying governments investing in the arts.
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