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    • Nowadays, medical treatment is getting beyond people`s budgets not only in undeveloped countries, but even in developed world.
    • Believe it or not, but millions of people in poor countries die from simple curable illnesses such as flue or different inflammations every year.
    • Their lives could be saved if they had money for medicine.
  • Who is responsible for their lives?
    • A common opinion is that drug companies should supply medicines to poor countries at reduced prices.
    • At a glance, medical companies can sell their production in particular countries cheaper than in developed ones.
    • Prosperous entrepreneurs wouldn`t smash if they didn`t make a high profit from some part of production.
    • However, we cannot put the responsibility of someone`s poverty on medical companies bodies.
    • The drug production is a business with its incomes and expenses.
    • Above all, drug companies pay taxes and salaries as other companies as well.
    • Additionally, they spend millions dollars on researches and experimentations every year in order to save our lives.
    • Not to mention that they need to renew equipment in accordance with modern medicine requirements.
  • In conclusion, this is a complex issue with no clear answers.
    • I tend to believe that there are another ways to solve the medication problems in undeveloped countries and I don`t agree with this common opinion.
  • It seems to me, that the UN should find the solution, perhaps, by supplying free simple medication to poor countries.

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    • Nowadays, medical treatment is getting beyond people`s budgets not only in undeveloped countries, but even in developed world.
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    • Nowadays, medical treatment is getting beyond people`'s budgets not only in undevelopeding countries, but even inalso in the developed world.
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    • Believe it or not, but millions of people in poor countries die from simple curable illnesses such as flue or different inflammations every year.
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    • Believe it or not, but millions of people in poor countries die from simple curable illnesdiseases such as the flue or different inflammations every year.
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    • Believe it or not, but millions of people in poor countries die from simplecommon curable illnesses such as flue or different inflammathe flu and various infections every year.
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    • At a glance, medical companies can sell their production in particular countries cheaper than in developed ones.
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    • At a glance, mMedical companies can sell their production in particularproduce their goods in developing countries cheaper than inthey can in the developed onesworld.
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    • Prosperous entrepreneurs wouldn`t smash if they didn`t make a high profit from some part of production.
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    • Prosperous entrepreneurs wouldn`'t smasfeel the pinch if they didn`'t makhave a high profit from some part of productionmargin for all of their sales.
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    • Additionally, they spend millions dollars on researches and experimentations every year in order to save our lives.
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    • Additionally, they spend millions of dollars on researches and experimentations every year in order to save our lives.
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    • Not to mention that they need to renew equipment in accordance with modern medicine requirements.
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    • Not to mention that they need to renew equipment in accordance with modern medicine requiremental advances.
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    • I tend to believe that there are another ways to solve the medication problems in undeveloped countries and I don`t agree with this common opinion.
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    • I tend to believe that there are another ways to solve the medicationalth problems in undevelopeding countries and I don`t agree with thise common opinion stated above.
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    • It seems to me, that the UN should find the solution, perhaps, by supplying free simple medication to poor countries.
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