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    • I always wanted to do some job which would be relevant and in demand.
    • Therefore, I has chosen marketing as my specialty in the branch of the State University of Management in Kaliningrad.
    • However, 5 years of studying seemed so boring to me, because I was grinding away at school-time.
    • While studying, I got my first work-experience in promotion.
    • Job and my first self-dependent income carried me away so hard that studying took a back seat, and in the end I abandoned books at all.
    • While I was nothing to do I’ve decided to find kind of full-time and max-involved job when I could achieve smth.
    • So I started working in the TIS- Dialog.
    • I couldn’t return in my university and was decided to complete course in the branch of Moscow Academy of Finance and Law in Kaliningrad.
  • In the TIS-Dialog I coordinated the Internet-to-user-connection department.
    • In length of time my responsibilities have grown.
    • For almost 4 years of my working here I realized that any job, how interesting it would be, should let people dream, encourage and inspire them to want live, to make some new stuff, to make profit. So I quit.
    • And I decided to relax and think about what I want next to do and where I see myself in future.
    • During this time I got a job in one of the car-rental service.
  • Flexible working schedule has allowed me to continue my studies.
    • I was always interested in economics, and I was looking for a job in it.
    • I’ve decided to try myself in the banking sector, but there’s no job for such candidates, without experience or education profile, so got a job as a loan-specialist.
    • This job didn’t come up to my expectations, and I quit in six months again.
    • Since April 2013 here I am in Rutaobao project.
    • Originally my work is in writing a product descriptions, work with logistics companies, making some notes, verifying some bills, eventually I became responsible for operations related to warehouse, customer support.
    • But that is not all what I can do.
    • Virtoway employs specialists who I want to be look like.
    • They’re inspiring me, and I am interested to develop to reach my goals.
  • What about young people who decided to go working in IT?
    • These guys have made the right choice!) IT is all around us, it is an essential element of any business.
    • IT-solutions improve and simplify the work of all the others.
    • IT-people with their renovations help to lead all business, they are kind of pioneers in all its good way))).

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    • Therefore, I has chosen marketing as my specialty in the branch of the State University of Management in Kaliningrad.
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    • Therefore, I has chosen m Marketing as my specialty in the branch ofmajor at the State University of Management in Kaliningrad.
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    • Therefore, I hasve chosen marketing as myto specialtyise in the branch ofMarketing at the State University of Management in Kaliningrad.
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    • However, 5 years of studying seemed so boring to me, because I was grinding away at school-time.
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    • However, 5 years of studying seemed soextremely boring to me, because I was [grinding away at school-time: not sure what you mean].
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    • However, 5 years of studying seemed so boring to me, because I was grispending away at school-timell of my time to study.
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    • Job and my first self-dependent income carried me away so hard that studying took a back seat, and in the end I abandoned books at all.
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    • Job and my first self-dependent income carried me awayWorking and making my own money made me feel so hardigh that studying took a back seat, and in the end I abandoned books at all.I didn't bother studying much. [Did you drop out of college or did you get expelled?]
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    • JThe job and my first self-independent income carried me away so hard that studying took a back seat, and in the end I abandoned books at allll together.
    • Job and my first self-dependent incomeSince I started working and earning money I got carried me away so hard that studying took a back seat, and in the end I abandoned books at all.. Meaning my educations took a back seat.
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    • While I was nothing to do I’ve decided to find kind of full-time and max-involved job when I could achieve smth.
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    • While I washad nothing to do, I’ve decided to find kind ofa full-time and max-job which I could be really involved jobin, and whenre I could achieve smthomething.
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    • WhilBecause I washad nothing to do I’ve decided to find kind of full-time and max-involveda challenging, full-time job when Iich could achieve smthhelp me advance my career.
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    • I couldn’t return in my university and was decided to complete course in the branch of Moscow Academy of Finance and Law in Kaliningrad.
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    • I couldn’t return into my university and was, so I decided to complete course in the branch ofmy studies at Moscow Academy of Finance and Law in Kaliningrad.
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    • For almost 4 years of my working here I realized that any job, how interesting it would be, should let people dream, encourage and inspire them to want live, to make some new stuff, to make profit. So I quit.
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    • FoAfter almost 4 years of my working here I realized that any job, however interesting it wouldmight be, should let people dream, encourage and inspire them to wantin livfe, to make some new stuff, to makeinnovation and profit. So I quit.
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    • I’ve decided to try myself in the banking sector, but there’s no job for such candidates, without experience or education profile, so got a job as a loan-specialist.
      투표하세요!
    • I have decided to try myself in the banking sector, but there’s no job for such candidates, without experience or education profile, so I got a job as a loan-specialist.
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    • Originally my work is in writing a product descriptions, work with logistics companies, making some notes, verifying some bills, eventually I became responsible for operations related to warehouse, customer support.
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    • Originally, my work iwas in writing a product descriptions, working with logistics companiecompanies' logistics, mtaking some notes, and verifying some bills, e. Eventually I became responsible for operations related to warehouse, customer support.
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    • IT-people with their renovations help to lead all business, they are kind of pioneers in all its good way))).
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    • IT-people wWith their reinnovations help to lead all, IT-people, help advance business,es; they are kind of pioneers in all its good way)))their own right.
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