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  • Introduction of a dissertation

    • Question: Is it possible to combine idealism with a professional carrer?
    • The idealism is a philosophic thinking, but also an attitude which guide all actions to an aim, the aim of the ideal.
    • The ideal has always seen like impossible to reach.
    • But some people arrive to come closer more, and it is ever satisfying.
    • In the daily life, it can take the form of a profession, like it is the case for a lot of people.
    • So, we can pose the question: can we have the capacity to have a carrer which correspond to our expectations, our ideal or is it not possible?
    • Can we hope to become a day, a famous and beautiful actor or a passionate and brilliant explorer?
    • While we are in example an unknow uggly person and introverted or salaryman very ancred in a routine with a life which is resuming to: sleep, eat, work?
    • To answer for that, we will explore reasons which prevent people to go to their hopes, in a second axis, possible solutions which could debouch in an evolution, and in last time, results that we could get.

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    • The idealism is a philosophic thinking, but also an attitude which guide all actions to an aim, the aim of the ideal.
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    • The iIdealism is a philosophical way of thinking, but also an attitude which guides all actions to an aim,wards a certain goal - the aimgoal of the ideal.
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    • So, we can pose the question: can we have the capacity to have a carrer which correspond to our expectations, our ideal or is it not possible?
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    • So,Thus we can pose the question: can we have the capacity to have aa person's carreer which correspond to oumeet their expectations, ou and their ideal or is it not this impossible?
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    • While we are in example an unknow uggly person and introverted or salaryman very ancred in a routine with a life which is resuming to: sleep, eat, work?
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    • Whileif we are in, for example, an unknow uggly person and introverted or salaryman very ancred in a routine with a life which is resuming to: gly introverted nobody or a worker stuck in a mindless routine where their life defaults to just "sleep, eat, and work"?
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    • To answer for that, we will explore reasons which prevent people to go to their hopes, in a second axis, possible solutions which could debouch in an evolution, and in last time, results that we could get.
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    • To answer for that, weI will explore the reasons whichthat prevent people to go to their hopes, in a second axis,from achieving their dreams, and secondly, discuss possible solutions which could debouch bring an evolutionbout change, and fin last time, results that we could ally, possible results of this changet.
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