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  • National Holiday

  • I had an amazing holiday!
  • The first two days I visited my friend's college in Aba, a beautiful place near Wenchuan.
    • We ate many delicious foods there, such as spicy hot pot, omelette that I had not eaten before.
  • We also had a barbecue, and shared a cake together.
    • And, we went to the weekend party, many people danced there.
    • And then, I went to home, preparing for buying a computer.
  • The fourth day I went to visit my sister in hospital and bought a computer, not very expensive but useful. Finally!
  • On the fifth day I stayed at home, some relatives visited us, we had a great time.
  • And the sixth day I went to the amusement ground in Wenjiang(A city near Chengdu.) with another friend.
  • We went on the roller coaster, bumper cars and many other thrill plays.
    • My greatest thril went on the bungee jumping!
    • It's my first time to try it, really scaring!
  • I didn't have a good "performance", I guess, because I was too afraid.
  • But I still want to try again someday, and maybe next time I'll try higher.
  • Do you like bungee jumping?

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