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my topic is "it has been said that the love of money is the root of all evil" , i just write a little , hope somebody help me do it , give me some supporting sentences, thanks a lot this is my writing "Many of us grew up hearing that money is the root of all evil, but we don't really know about it. money is neither evil nor good. it is just evil when we use money for bad purpose. money is able to be many things, depending on how we use it.

We need to understand the difference between currency for our to live and currency is driven by greed.

It is a fact that money makes the world change and this is how we pay for food, shelter, education, travel and everything in life has a price. in addition, Money is the reward for our work in order to allow us to enjoy the good things in life.

From this point of view, money is not the evil; it is just a source of our survival. "