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添削のお手伝いをしましょう！修正済み

_Jul_からのテキスト - English

  • Fashion

    • Nowadays fashion has become actual in modern society.
  • Fashion is followed by youth and adults.
    • Many people visit fashion show, read fashion magazines and look through fashion articles on the Internet.
    • We can see everywhere many advertising with popular brands such as D&G, Chanel, H&M, Gucci and many other.
  • Fashion makes us individual.
    • Today we can see many styles: classic, hippie, indie, retro but there are many advantages and disadvantages.
  • First of all, fashion can make you more creative in your every day life.
    • Every style of clothes corresponds to a particular style.
    • For example, black costume is suited for work in office.
    • It makes us look conservative and respect.
    • To go to theatre we choose nice clothes and hairstyle.
  • It makes people look elegant and attractive.
    • Furthermore, fashionable can give a person more confidence.
  • On the other hand, having good looks is not enough to have success.
    • You need to be intelligent and well educated person.
    • Also we must not forget that moral human's qualities are more important and valuble.
    • In conclusion, "fashion" things always change, trendy stuff is always changing and many people will always follow that trend.
    • So, we need to develop our own style, we need to be ourselves because it is unique and never goes out of "fashion".

添削の手助けをお願いします！ - English