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  • Rationalism

    • People tend to think that they can manage their life, being rational and giving a credit to their logic.
    • The truth is, that in most cases it’s not enough for a happy and careless existence.
    • At first, being a sider of rationalism can be an impediment to self-developing because people have a soul, which is related to Creator (or whoever, whichever it may be).
    • As people’s inner being is connected to some forces, man can’t completely relay on his logic and common sense.
    • At second, people make self-imposed boundaries when they try to explain extrinsic voice with rationalism.
    • It leads to misbalanced living and inability to have harmony and congruency inwardly.
    • At third, rationalism makes people vulnerable and frail because of preposterous live decisions that they can make, thinking about bright and logic future.
    • It happens because people can’t predict everything.
  • Additionally, life is more complex than people tend to think.
    • It continued before people, during they existence and will last for infinity after them.
    • To stay in harmony and not to exacerbate problems people should learn how to embrace different circumstances and life pace.

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    • At first, being a sider of rationalism can be an impediment to self-developing because people have a soul, which is related to Creator (or whoever, whichever it may be).
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    • At first, being a sidupporter of rationalism can be an impediment to self-developingment because people have a soul, which is related to the Creator (or whoever, whichever it may be).
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    • At first, being aon the sider of rationalism can be an impediment to self-developing because people have a soul, which is related to the Creator (or whoever, whichever it may be).
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    • As people’s inner being is connected to some forces, man can’t completely relay on his logic and common sense.
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    • As people’s inner being is connected to some forces, manthey can’t completely relay on his logic and common sense.
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    • As peoplea person’s inner being is connected to some forces, manone can’t completely relay on his logic and common sense.
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    • At second, people make self-imposed boundaries when they try to explain extrinsic voice with rationalism.
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    • At sSecondly, people make self-imposed boundaries when they try to explain extrinsic voice witernal influences through rationalism.
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    • At sSecondly, people makcreate self-imposed boundaries when they try to explain their extrinsic voice with rationalism.
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    • At third, rationalism makes people vulnerable and frail because of preposterous live decisions that they can make, thinking about bright and logic future.
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    • At tThirdly, rationalism makes people vulnerable and frail because of preposterous livfe decisions that they can make,ey might make while thinking about a bright and logical future.
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    • At tThirdly, rationalism makes people vulnerable and frail because of the preposterous livfe decisions that they can make, while thinking about a bright and logical future.
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    • To stay in harmony and not to exacerbate problems people should learn how to embrace different circumstances and life pace.
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    • To stay in harmony and not toavoid exacerbateing problems, people should learn how to embrace different circumstances and lifthe pace. of life.
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    • To stay in harmony and so as not to exacerbate problems then people should learn how to embrace different circumstances and a changing life pace. ¶
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