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  • Building good habits

    • Nowadays, many people are always seen holding their phones and any technological devices, it’s not strange with the speed of the development in digital world now.
  • Everybody has a smartphone and it’s awesome that humans are getting smarter day by day.
    • I don’t deny the benefits of technology, it’s one of the most important inventions, thanks to it I can easily search for the information I want to know, I can contact people everywhere, and I have learned a lot of useful things just by a click, it’s really meaningful to me.
    • But everything has its two sides, don’t you see more and more people increasingly depend on technology?
    • If you ask someone or a kid a question who has a phone, I’m sure half of them will turn on their phones and show you the answer on it, they don’t mind thinking, I think it’s bad, that makes your brain lazier.
    • The most hated thing I see every day is that everyone just focus on their technological services, when they walk, sleep, work or even if they are talking to someone, it’s not only impolite but also dangerous.
    • When you only know the appearance of your phone you won’t notice around, it can cause an accident, you may be hit by a car, collide objects and people surround you.
  • Secondly, if you don’t know how to use Internet correctly it can take your time away, just imagining you spend all your day surfing, haven’t done anything, and definitely you won’t realize you are wasting your precious time, every person only live once, remember?
  • Moreover, there are many risks when using Internet, you don’t know who are good and bad through the screen, according to study, people who are usually surfing are less alert than people who know manage the time of using technological things, their brains are more flexible and logical.
  • And it’s one of the main reasons causes the loneliness and create emotionless people, especially children.
  • Therefore, why don’t we turn them off and do our lifespan over?
  • Initially, it will be a very hard time, changing the way you have lived or a habit that has been carved into your brain.
  • You don’t need to limit all the activities and time using Internet, just write down some things you can do without it, it may be your hobbies, sports, or even just sit down and talk to yourself (It was considered a good way to clean your soul up).
  • Spend time on the Internet less and less day by day, you could delete some social media applications if necessary, it will not affect your life in fact, by a clear time, you will realize that you have more freedom and it’s fine to live without your smartphone.
  • Jogging, walking, swimming, talking to your friends, learning something brand new, cleaning your house, meeting people, etc… See?
  • There are many activities you can try out.
  • If you succeed in limiting your using time for screen, your view of life will totally be changed.
  • Another positive aspect is that your health will be developed every day, you eat more, sleep enough, create much energy for a new day and you have time for yourself, your body will be more active and stronger, it can foster the way you think more creative and unique, sounds great, right?
  • Now just turn off your phone, computer, tablet, laptop, close your eyes for some minutes and think about how much time have you wasted?
  • What should you do from now?
  • What will you change and can be changed?
  • The answer for all those questions is yourself, of course, you have to change yourself at first, change the habit before, rebuild your time table, add more activities and let’s learn new things every day, the most significant point to achieve the better version of you is determination to see your new future.

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    • Nowadays, many people are always seen holding their phones and any technological devices, it’s not strange with the speed of the development in digital world now.
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    • Nowadays, many people are alwayscan be seen holding their phones and any technological devices, it’s not strange with the speed of the development in digital world nowother tech devices, however this isn't surprising considering the speed at which technology is developing these days.
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    • I don’t deny the benefits of technology, it’s one of the most important inventions, thanks to it I can easily search for the information I want to know, I can contact people everywhere, and I have learned a lot of useful things just by a click, it’s really meaningful to me.
      Vote now!
    • I don’can't deny the benefits of technology, it’s one of the most important inventions, t. Thanks to it I can easily search for the information I want to know, I can contact people everywhere, and I have learned a lot of useful things just by a click, it’s realling. Personally, I find this to be very meaningful to me.
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    • But everything has its two sides, don’t you see more and more people increasingly depend on technology?
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    • But everything has its two sides, don’t you see more and more to it, this is apparent when you consider how many people are increasingly dependent on technology?.
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    • If you ask someone or a kid a question who has a phone, I’m sure half of them will turn on their phones and show you the answer on it, they don’t mind thinking, I think it’s bad, that makes your brain lazier.
      Vote now!
    • If you ask someone or a kid a question who haspose a question to any adult or kid with access to a phone, I’m surecertain half of them will turn on their phones and show you the answer on it, t. They don’t mind thinkingare unlikely to think of the answer themselves, I think it’s bad, thao over-rely on technology. It makes your brain lazier.
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    • The most hated thing I see every day is that everyone just focus on their technological services, when they walk, sleep, work or even if they are talking to someone, it’s not only impolite but also dangerous.
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    • The most hated thing I seeIt is an unpleasant reality of every day is that everyone just focus on their technological services, whenlife that I see that everyone is so absorbed by technology. Even while they are walking, sleeping, working or even ifwhile they are talking to someone, i their attention is elsewhere. It’s not only impolite but also dangerous.
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    • When you only know the appearance of your phone you won’t notice around, it can cause an accident, you may be hit by a car, collide objects and people surround you.
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    • When you're only know the appearancefocused ofn your phone screen you won’t notice around, it can causeyour surroundings. This can result in an accident,: you may be hit by a car, or collide with the objects and people suraround you.
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    • Secondly, if you don’t know how to use Internet correctly it can take your time away, just imagining you spend all your day surfing, haven’t done anything, and definitely you won’t realize you are wasting your precious time, every person only live once, remember?
      Vote now!
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  • Sentence 9
    • Moreover, there are many risks when using Internet, you don’t know who are good and bad through the screen, according to study, people who are usually surfing are less alert than people who know manage the time of using technological things, their brains are more flexible and logical.
      Vote now!
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    • You don’t need to limit all the activities and time using Internet, just write down some things you can do without it, it may be your hobbies, sports, or even just sit down and talk to yourself (It was considered a good way to clean your soul up).
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13
  • Sentence 14
    • Spend time on the Internet less and less day by day, you could delete some social media applications if necessary, it will not affect your life in fact, by a clear time, you will realize that you have more freedom and it’s fine to live without your smartphone.
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14
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    • Jogging, walking, swimming, talking to your friends, learning something brand new, cleaning your house, meeting people, etc… See?
      Vote now!
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    • Another positive aspect is that your health will be developed every day, you eat more, sleep enough, create much energy for a new day and you have time for yourself, your body will be more active and stronger, it can foster the way you think more creative and unique, sounds great, right?
      Vote now!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 18
  • Sentence 19
    • Now just turn off your phone, computer, tablet, laptop, close your eyes for some minutes and think about how much time have you wasted?
      Vote now!
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    • The answer for all those questions is yourself, of course, you have to change yourself at first, change the habit before, rebuild your time table, add more activities and let’s learn new things every day, the most significant point to achieve the better version of you is determination to see your new future.
      Vote now!
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