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  • Natural and Unnatural Death

  • My grandmother died a few days ago.
  • She has been very ill and bedridden for five years.
  • My mother was always looking after her during this period of time.
  • My grandmother will never be between us after this day.
  • In fact, we will surely feel her absence at home for a long time.
    • Generally, man feels very sad due to the death of a close someone.
    • So, when someone from us dies, we quickly remember that we will never remain in this life forever.
    • Man will die sooner or later and go to the afterlife.
    • Anyway, my grandmother passed away at home naturally.
  • However, in return, there are people in various countries who are dying tragically and unnaturally due to ongoing wars, hunger, and contagious diseases.
    • There is no doubt that the number of those who have been dying and killing in wars is extremely high.
  • This number significantly increases when warplanes bomb a place where there are a lot of people.
    • Of course, technology plays an important role in this subject, that is, in the death of people in wars.
  • Today, with the incredible advancements in military technology, all countries around the world are trying to improve their military capabilities to confront possible conflicts in the future.
    • For this reason, those countries produce deadly weapons, guided missiles, advanced warplanes, and warships, etc. On the other hand, people are also dying due to hunger and infectious diseases in different countries worldwide.
  • I think that decision-makers in major and developed countries can work to reduce deaths caused by hunger and diseases.
    • In addition, the earthquake also brings about the death of many people.
    • Obviously, we have seen and witnessed this reality in Türkiye when the earthquake occurred on February 6, 2023.
    • Lastly, in my opinion, maybe a natural death is the most beautiful way of death compared to an unnatural death.
  • In fact, life is too short.
  • Thus, we must live peacefully and depart from this world to the afterlife properly.

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