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  • FCE essay

  • One of the best ways to keep children healthy is to spend time outside.
    • So let’s try to analyze the pros and cons of this activity and what should be done to stimulate kids to go out.
  • The vast majority of children enjoy walking a lot.
    • The main reasons of that are open area and giant amount of things to explore.
    • Kids can run, climb, jump, slide, scream, watch bugs, play with sand and meet new friends.
    • Other words they have got possibilities to satisfy their needs to spend the energy and get new knowledge about the world.
    • The only disadvantage they might face here is danger environment such as cars, street dogs, broken constructions, sharp rubbish and etc. Adults are responsible to help children to spend their time safe and healthy.
    • They should remember that after long studying hours kids need to relax their nervous system and reduce stress.
    • Teachers might tell them interesting facts about the nature to develop their curiosity.
    • Parents might present kids new games, visit new places together, help to find new friends.
  • Government should also be involved.
    • It’s important to invest money to build new play and sport grounds, to put new sport equipment and colorful interactive construction, open theme and rope parks.
    • In conclusion, I believe that it’s a nature desire of any child to spend time outdoors.
    • Meanwhile it’s adults’ responsibility to create safe and immersive environment.

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