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  • Smartphones disadvantages

  • Smart phones are very dangerous for human mental health.
    • To start with , smart phones impair the memory as excessive reliance on them in almost every thing such as saving phone number or find out the way using GPS will make the brain depend on phones to save information rather than the memory with in turn decrease its abilities.
    • Moreover, smart phones cause many disorders in the nervous system in the brain which lead to depression, weakness of imagination and creativity.
    • In addition, the world health organisation has classified the phone radiation as a carcinogen ,and many statistics have shown that phone radiation damages the brain tissue , and that causes brain cancer .
    • In conclusion, smart phones are a big harm to our brains.

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    • To start with , smart phones impair the memory as excessive reliance on them in almost every thing such as saving phone number or find out the way using GPS will make the brain depend on phones to save information rather than the memory with in turn decrease its abilities.
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    • To start with , smart phones impair the memory as there is an excessive reliance on them in almost every thing such as when saving phone numbers or finding out the way using GPS will. This makes the brain depend on phones to save information rather than thehuman memory withich in turn decrease its our brain's abilities.
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    • Moreover, smart phones cause many disorders in the nervous system in the brain which lead to depression, weakness of imagination and creativity.
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    • Moreover, smart phones causeresult in many disorders in the nervous system inof the brain which lead to depression, weakness of imagination and creativity.
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    • In addition, the world health organisation has classified the phone radiation as a carcinogen ,and many statistics have shown that phone radiation damages the brain tissue , and that causes brain cancer .
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    • In addition, the wWorld hHealth oOrganisation has classified the phone radiation as a possible carcinogen , and many statistics have shown that phone radiation damages the brain tissue , and that causes brain cancer .
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